Open Poetry #48 |
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A sonnet |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
My mirror lies. It must. I am not old. Time lies. Not being bound by what I see With ease I look away from glass and hold to youth informed and vital in my memory, Time lies. It must. To look on you with eyes That strip away the memory, cut to bone, Is much the harsher mirror, but I find Sweet comfort not to face time’s lies alone. How then can we be old? So long as hearts Inform, lies of time and mirrors hold No sway. We know our youth anew and start each day with sweeter lies by lovers told. In life and death, I hold you so, as Spring, And curse all temporal and sere imaginings. There is a bit of a jest in here which someone will probably ferret out. Best, Jimbeaux ![]() |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You always were a bit over my head. You've been on my mind, much, lately. And I've decided that I will stop saying that I can't write sonnets, and just say that I won't. So it'll seem like a preference. But other people's seem to read so nicely. and as for the topic? I put my make up on with a compact. My eyes are really sexy. Have no idea what the rest of me looks like. Now CAMERAS? Those are devices of deceit. (Remind me to tell you the story about the Karen and Spike Lee photo argument...) Miss you much, and it's good to see ya around. ![]() Enjoyed. ![]() |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
So long as hearts Inform, lies of time and mirrors hold No sway. I love this. ![]() |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Hi Serenity -- Probably better over your head than under your thumb... ![]() Hi Suthern -- I'm glad the lines resonated with you. Our 50th high school graduation year is coming up, so I'm seeing a lot of pictures of friends. Boy, did they age! My wife Deb does in fact seem not to age. Me, I've been old and kind of creepy since I was about 10... Best to all, Jimbeaux ![]() |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
i seem to be having as much trouble understanding your replies as I do your poetry... just thought I'd say hey. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I wish..wish wish, that I could hear meter like others do. My mind forces things to fit where they shouldn't, and that is messy. I liked the sweetness, what I perceived as sly humor... the last line, if SERE means what I think you meant for it to mean, made me chuckle. ![]() |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Excuse me Jimbeaux, but Nic? "I wish..wish wish, that I could hear meter like others do. My mind forces things to fit where they shouldn't," If I can do something with that, do you mind very much if I steal it? ![]() sorry Jb, thx Nic? ![]() |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Sonnets are hard for me, I have trouble with their strict form, and they never flow like this one..love the theme, love the poem. and this "Me, I've been old and kind of creepy since I was about 10..." lol We seem to be about the same age,Jimbeaux But I have been creepy since I was eight. I enjoyed your sonnet...and your jesting. "It is difficult |
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The_Doctors_Angel_32 Member
since 2011-01-14
Posts 337Florida, USA |
This is a really cool poem to me. Nobody likes what the mirror tells them. Also sometimes what the mirror tells them can help them. At least that is what I got out of this poem. When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
lol K by all means, m'lady ![]() |
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Grinch Member Elite
since 2005-12-31
Posts 2929Whoville |
quote: The title. ![]() |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Ah Grinch, you make me feel like I've come back home. Unfortunately, that's somewhat like going back to New Jersey. Thank you all for taking a moment with this. Best, Jimbeaux ![]() |
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