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Gale
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Russia

0 posted 2013-07-22 02:31 PM


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Oh, really, it’s so unfair
If only I could justify myself
What have I done? And what have you seen?
Why did you suspect me of every sin?
I never gave you the air


You saw me leaving, it’s true
I thrust my way for so long and lost
I’ve changed my place, returned to my past
And finished the game, for it can not last
I didn’t escape from you


I used to walk through your life
Without a trace, an invisible being
You tell them about my daily routine
You cry when I fall, applaud if I win…
Unreal to come to light


Forborne with the time it took
I followed your steps in withering sands
I crossed your way in alien lands
The closer I come the further you stand
The more disappointed you look


But now I step aside
Too much for my hope, and I look away
I forced every door, any trick I tried
Wherever I look – never catch your eye
I’m sorry, if you are blind


I heard that you call me proud
Sometimes I merely wish I could fly
But someone has bound me to shoulder the sky
He’s kicking my knees and wondering why
Its dome is crashing so loud

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22/07/2013

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[This message has been edited by Gale (07-23-2013 04:19 AM).]

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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2013-07-22 03:23 PM


I grasp all the ache and heartbreak within the structure of this poem, Gale, this line especially is a tell-all line . . .
quote:
Sometimes I merely wish I could fly
But someone has bound me to shoulder the sky

This is one of your very best work, and it is sad, but it has a look ahead appeal that can be refreshing.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Gale
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since 2013-06-10
Posts 578
Russia
2 posted 2013-07-22 03:30 PM


Thank you, Jerry, very much!
Sorry, I've been writting it all day long and don't know why I'm so tired, that can't choose the words.
Go to sleep...

EmmaRose
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since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376
Midwest
3 posted 2013-07-23 11:52 AM


in the sadness and disappointment, you do wear a badge of courage throughout, if but only through poetry, a good thing
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