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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

0 posted 2012-02-25 02:18 PM

I built a boat of solitude
to navigate closer the truths,
the lonely and rocky souls,
the empathy of falling stars,

I built a boat of sweetness
to navigate your friendly dresses,
forget the origin of hurt loves
on the hull of your spicy hips,

I built a boat of tranquility
to make the tour of your fragile heart,
by enjoying every evident wave
as an apple in your hands,

I built a boat without pain
to cross your affectionate eyes,
to find loving islands
In every improvised tacking.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

1 posted 2012-02-25 02:19 PM

Yann,

You are a master boat builder and a fine poet. I do love this poem and I will be back to read it again.

A

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-02-25 02:47 PM

Great piece of writing, Yann. Almost classic in its presentation. It seems you have build a mighty fine boat . . .

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2012-02-25 07:18 PM

I built a boat of tranquility
to make the tour of your fragile heart,
by enjoying every evident wave
as an apple in your hands,

I built a boat without pain
to cross your affectionate eyes,
to find loving islands
In every improvised tacking.

Crafted with love and understanding... this is beautiful!

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

4 posted 2012-02-26 12:29 PM

Lovely,yann. Your "boat" is certainly sea worthy and filled wth beautiful thoughts.
Ida

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

5 posted 2012-02-26 09:09 AM

"As an apple in your hands" That is my favorite line; perfect imagery.

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

6 posted 2012-02-26 03:27 PM

thanks alison for the kind and gentle comment, appreciated,

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

7 posted 2012-02-26 03:28 PM

thanks jerry as a breton i like boats and sea, it was natural so to write this boat,

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

8 posted 2012-02-26 03:29 PM

thanks suthern

have a nice day

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

9 posted 2012-02-26 03:30 PM

thanks ida

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

10 posted 2012-02-26 03:32 PM

thanks you nicole, this is mainly a poem of images, more poetical than realistic, i appreciate your comment

yann

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

11 posted 2012-02-27 04:30 PM

Beautiful and soothing, Yann. Just what I needed tonight.

Owl

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

12 posted 2012-03-02 07:30 PM

v. interesting 'write' !

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

13 posted 2012-03-02 09:14 PM

Nice boat...James

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

14 posted 2012-04-01 09:02 AM

quote:
I built a boat of solitude
to navigate closer the truths,
the lonely and rocky souls,
the empathy of falling stars,

I built a boat of sweetness
to navigate your friendly dresses,
forget the origin of hurt loves
on the hull of your spicy hips,

I built a boat of tranquility
to make the tour of your fragile heart,
by enjoying every evident wave
as an apple in your hands,

I built a boat without pain
to cross your affectionate eyes,
to find loving islands
In every improvised tacking.

Oh, those islands of love and peace ... you navigate so beautifully here, dear Yann!

Exceptional. I can only imagine how exquisite this is in French!

Margherita

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

15 posted 2012-04-01 10:07 AM

Enjoyed your poem Yann. Ms. E

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

16 posted 2012-04-01 01:20 PM

I'd most certainly love to find such a 'boat without pain' and 'that empathy of falling stars'

a mos interesting 'write' !

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