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Princess and the Pea
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Princess and the Pea |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida 
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today is a hole to crawl into, a black writhing visceral mouth. she can taste the edge with her tongue tip hovering the corner with her teeth; it is puckered lifelessness. she knows she started it; a xanthian princess, and more than a swallower of validation. she is soft and cold flesh to wrap around the wrechedness; an equal in days of misery if not the quantity, of pills it takes to pale the skin to lazuline. tragedy has a particular texture when it is carelessly flung, rope-like across the pearlescence of her throat; that shallow vein that indent she fills with wishes. as if someone could lick it away with the roughness of their tongue, somehow sustain nourishment from mindlessness. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Okay. So your day isn't going so great, Nicole. Had to look up lazuline. Reading this almost gave me shivers, and that never happens, I've a thick skin. Your descriptive passages were nightmarish and totally upsetting. The thing is, I have had days where I wrote the same type of poetical incubusish screams . . . ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
We're prisoners in our own heads, sometimes, I reckon. It burns. Writing helps, though. Stuffs it all into words on a page, and that confines it and makes it managable. Thanks, Jerry |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Like a black hole in space These kinds of days are days when even light cannot escape from the forces of darks gravity. "she is soft and cold flesh" Is this a trait of a "xanthian princess"? "if not the quantity, of pills it takes to pale the skin to lazuline." Are the "pills" the pea under the many mattresses, that the princess feels, like in the tale? that cause her (your) discomfort? "as if someone could lick it away with the roughness of their tongue" The tongue of the prince that is testing the princess for reality? A mystery here, I like it.. Good poetry, as allways from you. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
My birthday wishes to you in Annoucrments taste diabeticly sweet after reading your poem. Nicole, I am not good at writing literary style comments. I just know what I like and what I don't like. I love this poem. I love how you use words - so beautifully fuse them together. I appreciate how you break the lines in your poems. You craft your poems well ... and I like where they take me. Your poems fascinate me. We are so different and often I want to have written what you wrote. That happened with this poem - I want to have written it. Thank you for writing and sharing. Oh ... and ... Happy Birthday. Alison |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Hi Ford  Your insight is astonishing. (Or I'm really obvious... lol) There is a lot to it, that I don't feel comfortable spelling out in the open - but, I will say that I deal with anxiety, and this poem is a struggle through that.Alison - your birthday wishes, were perfect, and they made me feel special and thought of; and that is a gift that I cherish. I sincerely thank you for that. You are good at you, and that, I feel is a much truer and rarer trait than many in this world possess. I admire that, and your genuine and heartfelt comments. I would love to know why you see us so differently... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I thought the entire poem wonderful but especially like the last verse... and more especially the last 3 lines. You start strong and just get better and better. *S* |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
A Pisces. I should have known. Takes one to know one. Even when your poetry is dark it still shines with your unique talent, Nicole. Ida |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms N....the title says it all? Eventually we just ignore the pea and decide we like wetting the bed. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
R, thanks miss Ida, (laughing) i know right? A sign that shows two fish swimming in opposite directions, and tied together suits my duality just right. Looks like i have awesome company. D, you have the misfortune of listening to the worst of me. I don't have any spare sheets, they are all being used as capes. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Hi Nicole ~ it's not that I think we are different ( I didn't word that very clearly in my last comment). Our writing style is very different, I believe. It's like looking at the bottom of two lakes ... One lake is clear. You can see the bottom and all that swims by. The other lake is more murky - a bit darker, and much more intriguing. That's you and the other is me. Both lakes, but so different. Now I need coffee ... it is far too early to be thinking this hard. Love whst you and share. xoxo A [This message has been edited by Alison (02-26-2012 12:38 PM).] |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
loved the poem and all comments, yann |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
So well done, Nicole, enjoyed. Oh, and Happy Birthday! Ms. E |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"tragedy has a particular texture when it is carelessly flung, rope-like across the pearlescence of her throat;" Wow! You sure can make a person think. Great title, fit the conflict. Love the way you write. (PS Happy birthday!!) (Sorry I missed the party!) JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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