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Gale
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0 posted 2013-07-05 03:00 PM


This poem is not completely mine. One my friend Evgenia Tsvyatko gave me the outline of her poem written in Russian and the picture which has inspired her (you can see it below). She asked me if I can write an English version. I've finished it just yesterday. And here is the result.

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I wish you to fly with me on my wings
But apple blossoms compose my plumage
Too weak, they could raise only your image
I spread them nowhere but in my dreams

It’s true when I say I resemble a bird
The genuine bird, I can sing so sweetly
But you never hear my jovial twitter
My voice uses to sound just in my head

Oh, please let the wind blow extremely strong
To tear my petals away forever
To make me alive
And to take us together
Away from the tree
On the wings of my song


July'2013

http://img607.imageshack.us/img607/5521/n8h1.jpg


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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2013-07-05 03:09 PM


A plaintive cry to be heard and seen and interacted with is what this very sad poem says to me. You friend should be proud of the interpretation.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Gale
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2 posted 2013-07-05 03:13 PM


I hope she will like it.

Did you see the picture?
It really fits the idea!

JerryPat2
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3 posted 2013-07-05 03:14 PM


Yes, of course I saw the picture. She will like what you did with her poem I'm sure.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Gale
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4 posted 2013-07-05 03:22 PM


Thank you, Jerry!
JamesMichael
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5 posted 2013-07-16 10:11 PM


enjoyed...James
Gale
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since 2013-06-10
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6 posted 2013-07-17 07:27 AM


Thank you, James )

I have to say that I've found an error:
"uses" instead of "used" (((

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