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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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the foot of midnight leans into the armpit of high moon strolling, extolling and caressing marinated fleshy mounds sitting on the psychedelic loveseat therefore . . . the tale is told on queen-sized foundations in various stages of covering for the body the nudes smile the smile which say they have nothing to hide whereas the dressed yaps a lot trying to conceal sins hidden beneath clothing every day or so they change places the nudes become dressed and the . . . ah, but you're hip, you "get it" ultimately the end justifies everything ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
love your word play here. Good morning JP. Lori  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Good morning, Lori, and thank you for being here. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
love the "queen size foundations" . . . so apropos! . . . and the "marinated fleshy mounds". Quite a use of words my friend...truthfully descriptive... j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Appreciate your thoughts and comments, J, thanks for being here. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Very nice! I'm not sure that I've understood everything. Sins under clothes... Well, I don't know if I'm a great sinner, but I like to wear clothes and much more like to swim undressed ) |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I attempted to use clothes as a metaphor for committing unseen crimes, and the switching of the clothed to the naked I tried to say that we all have a tendency to do wrongs and then hide them. Thank you Gale, I appreciate your thoughts. Heh.Heh Swimming nude makes you feel freer, don't you think? ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Actually it does, Jerry ) Concerning your metaphor... ))) I don't like to do wrong (if I know what is wrong), but sometimes I hide even good acts and thoughts. I lie, but I think it's white lies, because I don't want to deceive anybody, as I wear clothes not because my skin is worse than my dress, but because I don't want to confuse people around. But when I write verses or sing, I forget any lie. That's why I hid my songs and verses from people all my life (as I swim naked only in wild desert places). Yes, I think that poetry and songwriting are very like swimming without clothes. You've found a very interesting parallel |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
That wasn't difficult to guess, I've also participated in that act of freedom. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
You like to swim nude? Or you meant poetry? |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I was talking about swimming nude, but it can be linked to poetry also, Gale, for I feel free when I compose poetry. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a delightful piece JerryPat! I enjoyed the way you played out the coverings vs. nudes and the different hidden aspects here. Cleverly handled, really well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you so much, Kit. Coming from you the words are truly good to see. I so appreciate the comments. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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