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JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2013-06-29 06:46 AM

you realize
your edges have slowly left you
it's impossible to tell apart
your character fibers have become uneven
and that leaves you
like a tattered nonentity
blinding you to who you are
who you were
your thoughts have given up on you
even hearing has taken on a different tone
you're listening to gibberish
unable to differentiate moments in time
sounds are your enemy
you find yourself gasping for air
your heart beating irregularly
pumping cement
dreaming of blood, red blood . . .
you somehow
find a way to put yourself back together
like a movie shown backward
you begin to settle down with relief
feeling peaceful
for stability has returned
you are whole again
but . . .
when you again face reality
where your edges have slowly left you
and it's impossible to tell apart
your character fibers have become quite uneven . . .

©June 15, 2013 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2013-06-29 10:52 AM

Interesting concept JP. The more I read it the more layers of meaning I discover.
Good write!

Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2013-06-29 12:04 PM

Well, Lori, life itself is a multifaceted ordeal. I guess in this poem I was trying to get across the concept that we can move ourselves in the direction of being at peace within, but you have to stay on guard because old troubles keep coming around to taunt and disturb us.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Lady Goodman
Member

since 2012-10-04

Posts 193

3 posted 2013-06-29 06:55 PM

peacefully on guard...hmmm.

I've never seemed to quite manage that particular skill.

But there is nothing left to do but try, right?

Enjoyed.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2013-06-29 07:04 PM

Thank you for stopping by and commenting on my poem, Lady Goodman. I meant "feeling peaceful" to be after I had collected myself and everything was calm, only then did I feel peaceful.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

5 posted 2013-06-29 11:54 PM

you remind us how helplessly human we are

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2013-06-30 07:20 AM

We are truly helpless, aren't we Emma? In matters of our destiny most of us merely flounder along.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

7 posted 2013-06-30 04:44 PM

Yes, I think I understand what you are saying here , Jerry.
Ida

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

8 posted 2013-06-30 05:21 PM

Thank you Ida, for your presence here and for understanding.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2013-07-09 10:46 PM

fine writing...James

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

10 posted 2013-07-10 07:54 AM

Thanks James . . .

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

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