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david3
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since 2013-03-02
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ohio

0 posted 2013-05-16 10:45 AM



House Of Cards

When every day brings yet one more barrage
Of childish taunts and ploys to bring you pain,
Stand firm and focus past his weak mirage,
For power given him is yours to gain.
A house of cards he builds to test your will,
Subjecting you to grief and deep despair..
The former peace you knew can be yours still,
For his house is the one in disrepair.
You've always had the strength to wage this war,
Release it now with confidence of cause.
Your dues were paid for what has gone before,
Reclaim your life without a moment's pause.

Now strip him of his weapons made of clay,
And watch his blackened heart himself betray.

© Copyright 2013 David William La Belle - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
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1 posted 2013-05-16 11:28 AM


Well done sonnet, David. A little ego building done with the aim of victory over what sounds like a cad of the highest sort. I liked this. Very much.

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Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
2 posted 2013-05-16 01:29 PM


Sounds like you are slying Goliath, David.
                                      Ida

Kit McCallum
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3 posted 2013-05-17 03:36 PM


I very much enjoyed the way this inspires and encourages someone to move on beyond the dark behaviour of another. Wonderful flow and rhythm throughout David! Really well done.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14
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4 posted 2013-05-20 08:24 PM


I'm thinking that Maggie Banning the daughter of Peter Pan might say here to your "dark character" what she told Captain Hook in the movie...


"You need a mother very, very badly!"


Good job on your Sonnet! Those are tough to write.  Enjoyed!  

EmmaRose
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5 posted 2013-05-21 03:56 PM


a poem with a message we can relate to and value
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