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KentAshbyKorb
Member

since 2013-05-05

Posts 99
Nc USA

0 posted 2013-05-05 05:08 PM

His pen painted words majestically
forming origami thoughts
contorted like geometry
or "Cirque Du Soleil" ladies

The rhythm cascaded
with waterfall form
forming waves
woven of wet words
scoring Channels
amidst a paper ocean

The thoughts
like boats
floating down the river
or sails
steady hailed
in a mellow gail
upon tidy tides

Cleaving a quiver of quail quill...

... He writes...

... As if words aren't enough!
to keep a mouth filled
with aquifer well water
or aspen springs chilled
until warm lips swallow
another teaspoon of poison
covered in government corn syrup
to sweeten the deal

What's more?
What is a mind made of matter, that doesn't know what the matter is?
But flattering thoughts
of less important things
resonate another
numbing frequency
smearing my tub of
"I can't believe it's not butter" brains
upon the burnt toast
of this lost world

Onward to fashion muses passion
upon otherwise
disgraced blank pages
heralding digital ages
before it crashes
and we are left with
nothing but
cookie cutter
"Mona Lisa smiles"

It's registration time
to enroll another time
Oh happy smart me !
Upper cut and class me
past the last ass they trashed
to latch me
into this enterprise of free traps!

Ill mime
To the best of my ability
"Ventriloquing"
A "varietous" parody
of parroted heresy
"proprieting" carelessly
casting every care
upon autocorrected industry.

Three words smithed

Make lighter loads of
what would be many more
wafted emissions displaced
by internal organic body fission
and decomposition
It's poop!

When the bell rings
and hell's hungry hounds sing
and all the proud think
nothing to consume the meek
with a cup of coffee
and two over easy

"You can count the syllables
to gain a meter
in your mouths foot race! "

And we can toast to another processed ideal wrapped in plastic
and stacked
upon "Walmart's shelfs"
for you and I to take for granted!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2013-05-05 05:23 PM

I'm not sure if I am a novice poet or not, so I'll just bow out.

~*~ I stayed up all night to see where the sun went. Then it dawned on me. ~*~

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2013-05-06 01:58 PM

"You can count the syllables
to gain a meter
in your mouths foot race! "

Wonderful, KentAshbyKorb! I thoroughly enjoyed this piece, including the references made in the quote above. As with the smaller poem of yours I just read, the rhyme and cadence here are crafted in a delightful manner. This has a very lyrical flow. Lovely work!

Best wishes,
/Kit

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2013-05-06 09:30 PM

I like the nuance in every verse!
Very cool title too!!

Lighthousebob
Member Elite

since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

4 posted 2013-05-07 05:33 PM

I enjoyed reading your poem and I thought that it would make for a really nice commencement ceremony speech. Big smiles, the word play was fun and I found the sophistication of many of your lines mixed with the pure and simple, i.e. "It's poop!" LOL, very intriguing. Very intriguing!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2013-05-14 09:13 PM

Enjoyed...especially the references to HFCS and Walmart...James

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