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The Thief That I Am
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The Thief That I Am |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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 within my delicate dreams numbed standing in the shadows hidden pilfering excerpts from thoughts of joy conjured up from midnight's mysterious moon a thief is a thief even though you steal from yourself restlessly I tried to awake before the first light silently watching, waiting the shadowy me space walking across the moonscape bent forward into a slither larceny so strong it had a smell what would I want to steal from myself? as I slumbered I became rigid deep my stalking of the thief that was me into the room faint light shone my thieving self, dumb to extreme walked out of the shadow to confront me I saw his smile stretch my way the muted sounds of daylight was apparent oh my now I know what my thief would rob he took the night so there would be morn ©February 27, 2013 / Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Enjoyed this, but I have a slightly different take on it. Come take from me, I don’t need the daylight, preferring the night, Steal that great light bulb in the sky Cover it with clouds passing by Make the darkness always nigh. Come take from me And all be next to mourning. Gloom |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
To each their own, Gloom. I've certainty been a child of the night for many years. Thank you for stopping by . . . ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Cool Jerry - liked your take better... j. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I liked the title and the poem Jerry...Makes one stop and think. Nicely done as always. ~Victoria I was adored once too. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hah! So do I like my version better, J. Appreciate you stopping by to say how-to-do. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
It is always a supreme pleasure to see that you've made an appearance on my page, Victoria, thank you. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Hmm? Steal the night and give us another chance to make things right - maybe? Enjoyed the read, Jerry. |
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niteismyday Junior Member
since 2012-06-19
Posts 35 |
Wow, deep and mysterious, and so beautifully written. Very much enjoyed. -nimd |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
That about covers it, Helen. Someone has to be on guard to give us more chances to finally get it right. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank YOU, nimd, for taking the time to read and comment on my work. It is very much appreciated. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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