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the quarrel |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Tired of sighing, tired of crying Tired of wishing I was dying I cannot be me without you Door bell's silent, phone's not ringing Tired of waiting and hand wringing I know now just what I must do Fears of rejection are mocking As I stand at your door knocking But some risks just must be taken Are you still angry? Will you yell? Will you send my hopes straight to hell? Coming here, was I mistaken? and then you said 'hello' and opened the door wide and took my trembling hand and welcomed me inside Your arms, your heart – forever I was not alone in missing My beloved's lips I'm kissing And all of the hurt disappears Oh, what joy! We're reunited In your arms, my world is righted You gently brush away my tears and then you said 'will you?' and dropped down to one knee and took my trembling hand and pledged your love to me Now we'll face life together Now we'll face life together I wrote this little song a couple of years ago... and probably should leave it in its hiding place or move it on into the dumpster. LOL But it's Valentine's Day... what better time for poor sappy rhymes? LOL |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
good entry for the "St. Valentine's Day" queue! |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
So heartwarming to sing such a beautiful song! Enjoyed the tune!!  JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Not so sappy. Everyone likes a happy ending, suthern. Well, most everybody does. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Very lyrical indeed. I always thought Valentine's Day was for angst ridden, I hate the world type of poetry... Lol i('s nice to see your sappy side. Michael |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
secondhanddreampoet: Thank you! JL: Just be grateful you don't have to hear my singing, dear friend! LOL Thank you so much! JerryPat: I'll keep hoping for a happy ending till my life ends, I guess... And I can write about 'em even if I can't find 'em! Thank you!!Michael: I know... I usually hate the world so much on Valentine's Day I can't even express all my angst, poetically or not! LOL But the sap lurks beneath... and seeps out every decade or so. LOL Thank you so much! *S* |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A song full of hope and a desire for happiness...James |
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Strummer Junior Member
since 2012-03-14
Posts 12 |
We all have our fears of rejection, but you have expressed fear, hope and gratitude that your feelings were returned, nice write |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
I enjoyed your poem, Suthern Gal, it was real and touching, ms. e |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
If one doesn't keep hoping, wishing, trying, one NEVER sees (what one is looking for). Great write, my friend, and no matter what, the dream must be kept! j. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Smiling with you...  |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Not sappy at all, Ruth. Absolutely lovely. Owl |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
JamesMichael: Thank you so much - both for your understanding comment and for digging to find this one! *S* Strummer: One of the great things about writing is I can choose the ending... just wish I could in real life! LOL Thank you! ebonygirl: Thank you so much, sweet friend... I'm glad you enjoyed! *S* jwesley: Hope's become quite battered through the years, but I'm wishing... I'm trying... I'm trying... I'm trying! LOL Thank you so much!! Sunshine: Smiles are good... thank you! *S* Owl: Thank you! *S* The challenge phrase was "and then you said"... I read it and the song was born... annoying me until I wrote it down. *S* |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
We must give hope abundant room in our lives and that's what you have done here and very beautifully so, dear Ruth. Love, Margherita |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
passing shadows poem made me cry, but this makes me smile.....even if it is the stuff dreams are made of.....*smile* someones gotta have a happy ending, why not us? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Margherita & luminosity: Two of my favorite ladies are making me smile with their wonderful comments... Thank you both so very much! *S* |
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TreasureFort Junior Member
since 2012-08-30
Posts 15 |
nice and happy in the end |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I love mushy stuff! This is perfect for Valentines Day or the last day of August Lori |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Yeah, I agree with Lori... Any day. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
I too love mussy stuff...well done...*BIG HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
TreasureFort: Oh, my - you dug deep to find this one! Thank you for the efforts and your kind comments! Lori, JL & Startime: Thank you for enjoying the mushy stuff! I appreciate your time and responses very much! |
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