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ThisDiamond
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0 posted 2013-01-27 02:02 PM


The Mouthing of Red Spider (VAS Challenge)

An offering of firestorm avulsed the cosmos pouting lips
Traverse of arms in seeming hell, one pure white dwarf turned tart ellipse
A spider red concurs allure, though Hades not of nectar sips

In earnest shed the flowing fire, that distant drawing by desire
Intent of song in movement eight, aglow incarnate star struck lyre
Burst forth the night sky Red’s attire

Then frilly limbs impart by night, addressed in flowing garment bright
Dispensed by theme adorned and scarred, along the lip lines mulled delight
This nebula so aptly named performs in sight

Copyright Kkh 1/27/13


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Victoria
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1 posted 2013-01-27 02:18 PM


This is great TD..Im glad you joined us with the challenge. Another fun challenge.
Nicely done as always.

~Victoria

VAS
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2 posted 2013-01-27 02:31 PM


Superbly a "diamond" for sure. Ethereal and concrete, figurative and precise.

I know I'm not quite coming up with the adjectives I truly want, but I'll claim age and end of flu the cause. Although, more likely it's just the webs fogging my file drawers of vocabulary.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Margherita
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3 posted 2013-01-27 07:07 PM


Fantastic, dear TD! I admire your style.

Margherita

Magnus
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4 posted 2013-01-31 09:35 PM


well done fair maid...not bad from a rookie.
Oklahoma Rose
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5 posted 2013-02-05 11:34 AM


Beautifully done!
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