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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869
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French Sonnet I listen to the raindrops fall and I remember long ago. The love of you, I use to know, the rain refreshes my recall. Your eyes, your lips, and you so tall, your voice your laugh,your heart aglow. I listen to the raindrops fall, and I remember long ago. Whisper of your sweet words and all, In my heart for you love does flow. The gift of love I did bestow in the arms of a moonlight shawl. I listen to the raindrops fall, and I remember long ago. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Beautifully done, Victoria. I've never ventured into the French Sonnet, preferring the Shakespearean style basically. You have written this with such a longing and reminiscences that is is very, very touching, and I quite enjoyed it. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you Jerry, I think this is my first French sonnet. I usually stick with the Shakespearean style too. Actually he wasnt really that tall ha!!but it rhymed. ~Victoria |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
"Actually he wasn't really that tall ha!! but it rhymed." We have to do what we have to do when we a regimented in the rhyming scheme, I understand that well . . . ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Beautiful...James |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Victoria - Now you got me pondering the pinings of my "long agos". I really enjoyed the craft of your words in this work and thanks for the memories they recalled V. Namyh |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Namyh...Thank you for your sweet comments and I hope you had some lovely long ago moments. James..Thank you, always nice hearing from you and hope all is well. ~Victoria Love is a smoke made with the fume of sighs. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Great to have such vivid memories. Nice writing, V. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thanks J. Hope you had a nice weekend. ~V |
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