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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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I took the last verse of a favorite poem and made it the first verse of this new one. Anyone care to try it with one of your poems? Silent Peace The field was dark, the pond was still And in the wraps of evening chill As memories were passing through I thought of you - I thought of you The summer suns that hovered high And moons that rolled across the sky Were seasons passing silently Embracing me - embracing me Your words were gentle like the breeze And touched my heart so tenderly That I was blinded by the truth Oh, wasted time! Oh foolish youth! Now looking back I must confess My only friend was loneliness The only dream my whole life through Was always you - was always you The field was stark, the evening too And in the dark I thought of you The fondest memories never cease To offer warmth and silent peace Elizabeth Santos |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Interesting concept with the last line becoming the first line of another poem. I like this poem however you came to write it, because you took on a past life, which I have had some experience with myself. We look back and cringe, don't we? I did. Anyway, excellent poetry, Elizabeth. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Elizabeth you can turn a phrase no matter from where it comes. Your writing is as supurb as ever. Love, Joyce |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I agree with Joyce and loved the read. j. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. This is good John . |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Enjoyed! Kat >^..^< |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You're amazing, Liz - Thank you for being you..  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Liz, I was just thinking of you today, and of a phone call from a few years ago when we spoke from an even farther difference than where I sit now...and as Nan says... so say I. I'm glad to see you are doing so well!  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Beautiful poem, Elizabeth. I have always been a fan of your poetry. Ida |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Now looking back I must confess My only friend was loneliness The only dream my whole life through Was always you - was always you I'd have to borrow a favorite poem from someone else... I try to forget mine! LOL But yours are unforgettable... and this is wonderful! I especially love the lines above! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
"Looking back I must confess My only friend was Loneliness" Those are some powerful words. This was beautiful, and had a perfect flow to it as well. I thoroughly enjoyed this... your pen drips with passion. Michael |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Beautifully written, enjoyed. Ms. E |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz...So lovely, this poem and you!! |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
just beautiful |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Everything you write is beautiful, Elizabeth! As are you! |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
This is a wonderful idea, Elizabeth. Your words fit perfectly, the theme of the original poem. Picking up where the other left off, with your own beautiful poetry. You have me curious though. What poem was the prompt from,, please say. Thank you for the poem. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Dear ice, thank you for inquiring. The original poem was "I Thought of You" which has been made into a song. I THOUGHT OF YOU Tonight I thought of you In evening’s chill As shadows slipped across the hill And stars were folded imnto night And disappeared - but that’s alright I knew the evening Would not bring Compassion with the warmth of spring The Ides of March is never kind When blowing through - but never mind I still can find A loveliness To bitter nights, but I confess A certain hush to solitude A certain edge to loneliness The field was black, the pond was still And in the wraps of evening chill As memories were passing through I thought of you - I thought of you Thank you all for your comments Liz |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Love that poem, Elizabeth...but I still have questions... Did you write "I thought of you"? If not, who did? I can't find it on the net, in lyrics, or poetry...:-( I am just full of questions-- I feel like Sheldon on the "Big Bang Theory"...lol ice aka ford Come read to me some poem, |
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Amberzlynnc Member
since 2010-08-24
Posts 229New Jersey |
Beautiful! And I love the idea.. I'll probably give it a go! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This poem can be founf onm my website. If you do a search for "custom poetry by Elizabeth" it will appear. then look inder my poems and then "Love". I can probably send you the song if you are interested Liz |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
great 'write' ! ... that 1st. verse is indeed mighty fine!! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Lizzie, you never cease to amaze me! Beautiful poetry from a beautiful soul. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Elizabeth..Great poem. The way you came about writting it is very clever. Since I have had a major case of writers block for about a year I think I will try your idea and see if it works...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Simply beautiful. Quietly beautiful. I love it. A |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Oh Elizabeth, it's been a long time since I've been here, and I'm glad to see some things never change. The beauty of your poetry for one... I love this |
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