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Remotely Removed |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Stars rise to the occasion only to fall from grace as all the shades of grey unfold random play on words and re-run on sentences are misguided where nothing less is more turns to dark. Static clings to flat screens while black turns into blue elevating the pedestal in hopes to ease the throbbing pulse that pains me. Spying eyes at half mast endure the aftermath bruises of the psyshe never mend harboring thoughts channels without change. A hairline fracture split down the heart of the matter breaks the silence numb and without feelings upgraded to stable like a soap opera remotely removed is bearable at best. Bit parts hurt to watch while marginal props and scripted plots go no where the cast set in a virtual mass are all too familiar their credits one and the same the epilogue ends at the beginning blinded by the starlights falling from grace. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
This is one of the best poems which addresses the agony of being hurt from within, from words spoken. Broken bones and other physical hurts and cuts take their toll, it is true, but they mend as eventually does the reason for them. But as you so aptly say . . . "bruises of the psyshe never mend" They never do, you are so absolutely right. You might try to shove them aside, hide them, forget them, but none of that works. The bruise of the psyche is ALWAYS there, festering, hurting . . . always. I loved this . . . ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
lots of good wisdom here Lori, that at least i, if not others, can learn from.. very nice piece as always |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
This is one of those poems that stirs you from the inside out. Why? because it is like Mr. Toad's Wild ride of the Mind boggling truth, lol! Well done, Blues! Ms. E |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
an inside sight that moved me in blue and nuances of deep, thanks for the deep and awesome words, yann |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
This is a poem of truth, perhaps lived by you in some way too? It is cloaked within the framework of a stage play...as the bard himself says '' all the world's a stage'' but even he couldnt summon up words to describe inner hurt or hurting of the mind that may never heal or return to how they once were...if only the mind was like a computer and you could just open up a dropdown area within and click a magic button like ''restore factory settings'', but then of course you would also lose all of those special memories and feelings that are stored in the folder of ''love/nostalgia''. Perhaps the only way to surmount the various hurts of mind and body is to think of them in a balance, when the darker hurts vist, try and find ''the light'' by seeking the content that would fit the ''love/nostalgia'' folder admirably, tipping the scales in a more favourable outcome and thus rendering the darker hurts powerless with the power of love, nostalgia and positve thougts/actions....may you always walk in coruscating light...of blue of course...lol.. Thank you for the words... as ever... Goldenrose. music was my refuge.i could crawl into the spaces between the notes and curl my back to loneliness - Maya Angelou |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Nicely done and you always say it like it is Lori. I enjoyed the comparisons too. Words do hurt but as along as they are not your words that hurt. hugss ~Victoria |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Sometimes things just don't go our way... The struggles in life. Enjoyed the read, Blues. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I should have attached a disclaimer... ...the cynic in me, made me do it!! and that's all I have to say about that. Thank you all for reading~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
OH, but you did... "Remotely Removed" Now that's a disclaimer... Just had to be... you know:  JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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