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Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2012-12-03 09:28 PM

She use to wear her skirt
a bit down towards the legs
of a small castle pitted
between the lagoon of the forest
and the restless leaves that scattered

Pressed against her skin
ivory,
wind to settled eyelashes
wrapped around her wrists
bands of gold
With a small scar pressed
alongside her face
indebted in the right side of her cheek
like the small window she use to speak to
when her feet ran cold next to the fireplace

The girl under the small road
where the jazz played blues
streamed through the smokey dust
as she pressed her nose
against the frozen cold

As her skin turned to the soft kilt of her mothers carpet
she took each top corner as she stretched herself
until her hair became a bit longer,
her legs a bit softer,
and between each breath,
a woman was born under the star studded coast
of the nights crest

For night begged dawn to rise
death praised life to shine
and a girls slight body
became the sequence of time
until her mothers black heels
felt the small shift of another woman's feet slide inside.

[This message has been edited by Tomer (12-04-2012 12:31 AM).]

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

1 posted 2012-12-04 09:07 AM

Very nicely done, my friend... loved the last line in particular...

j.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2012-12-04 09:32 AM

Liking this a lot....!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2012-12-05 06:11 PM

HI Tomer, I so enjoy reading you. Your poetry evolves in such a unique way.
It becomes almost life like, and the emotion is felt keenly.

Always my pleasure~

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

4 posted 2012-12-06 10:51 AM

Enjoyed. It brought back memories of wearing my mothers high heels when I was little. Especially on Sunday when we went to church I liked wearing her heels and nylon stockings.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2012-12-06 01:19 PM

A bit different from your usual writing, Blues but I like it.
Ida

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

6 posted 2012-12-09 04:12 PM

J _

Appreciate the love. Happy you enjoyed the last stanza - one of my favorites as well.

Cheers

Tomer

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

7 posted 2012-12-09 04:12 PM

Sunshine-

Always a pleasure. Happy you enjoyed.

Cheers

Tomer

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

8 posted 2012-12-09 04:13 PM

Blues-

Happy you enjoyed it so much. Very grateful for the kind words...take care

Cheers

Tomer

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

9 posted 2012-12-09 04:13 PM

Victoria-

I'm happy I could being you back to those days. Thanks for the kind comments.

Cheers

Tomer

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

10 posted 2012-12-09 04:14 PM

Ida-

Happy you enjoyed...different can be good.

Cheers

Tomer

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2012-12-14 07:22 PM

A pleasure to read...James

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

12 posted 2012-12-15 05:34 PM

Happy you enjoyed, James...hope you're doing well. Take care.

Cheers

Tomer

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