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Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

0 posted 2012-11-29 12:35 PM

A touch, a whisper on the skin
Reminds her of a love once dim
Combusts to flicker in the dark
Memories still hit the mark
Of his caress, like strokes of heat
Insinuate as her heart beats
Not lost to time, those years long gone
Remembers kisses cast upon
Frail fingertips that lift to soothe
A cheek once rounded, soft and smooth
They tremble as they stroke her lips
Navigate from breasts to hips
So long ago they had a life
He was her husband, she his wife
Her hearing lost, her vision dim
She hears his whispers on her skin

-

Alison

To my Mom

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

1 posted 2012-11-29 07:41 AM

Life goes by so quick. You have to make everyday count. Enjoyed Alison.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

2 posted 2012-11-29 07:54 AM

Very nice to see you again, my friend. Have missed your voice in these pages.

I know your mom will love this ... I do too.

j.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2012-11-29 08:58 AM

Beautiful, Alison.
Ida

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

4 posted 2012-11-29 06:02 PM

Alison, what a beautiful, magical tribute to your mother and the love between your parents! This blows me away and leaves me speechless.

Hugs to you and all your furry babies.
Owl

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

5 posted 2012-11-30 01:31 AM

Beautifully and soften written for your mom. I am sure she loves this. jo

Ethern
Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 150
on a plane

6 posted 2012-11-30 01:53 AM

i really enjoyed the rhyme scheme. well done.

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

7 posted 2012-11-30 09:38 AM

Ah, ya warm the cockles of me heart…
Nice write Alison!!

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Klassy Lassy
Member Elite

since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

8 posted 2012-12-01 02:48 AM

Alison, this is extraordinary because children don't always see their mothers in the light of youth and love. I could feel my heart grow tight in my chest as I read this, thinking how those memories must feel to her, as if it were only yesterday.... Hugs to you and yes, it's a tender poem. The memories are part of her very heart...and now yours. ~ Karen

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

9 posted 2012-12-01 11:16 AM

Wow, I loved this Alison... the flow, and the message combine wondrously. From one who can relate, you've left goosebumps.

Michael

katahdin
Senior Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

10 posted 2012-12-03 04:49 AM

WOW! Great poem , enjoyed very much!
Kat >^..^<

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2012-12-03 07:42 PM

This is good writing...James

luminosity
Senior Member

since 2005-11-18

Posts 813

12 posted 2012-12-04 10:55 AM

very nice

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

13 posted 2012-12-04 02:25 PM

This filled my heart so tears leak out my eyes. As a poem, it's wonderful... the last line is such an incredible image... and the perfect ending for a beautiful rhyme. As a tribute, it's filled with the kind of love and respect and empathy we can only hope someone, somewhere feels for us... the "knowing" is rendered so tenderly. It's a tremendous success as either poem or tribute - as both, it simply takes my breath away.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

14 posted 2012-12-04 02:52 PM

You are such a tender loving poet, Alison. This is really beautiful and so very touching.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

15 posted 2012-12-13 02:45 PM

Wonderful words written for your Mom ... I miss you lovely girl! xx

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

16 posted 2012-12-13 04:02 PM

Ali, when you mix time with memories,
you strike a formidable match.

Bless you!

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

17 posted 2013-01-10 12:13 PM

Descriptive of a timeless love. A true tribute to her.

XOx Uriah xOX
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since 2006-02-11

Posts 1403
Virginia

18 posted 2013-01-10 12:36 PM

::smiles:: Wonderful !

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

19 posted 2013-01-10 04:29 PM

I likes this, lots of imagery.

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

20 posted 2013-01-12 02:13 AM

I came in tonight with a bit of a heavy heart. My Mom is failing fairly fast at this point. It gave me pleasure to see her poem on the boards still. Thank you for reading and replying. Thank you for your kind thoughts.

xoxox
Alison

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