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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

0 posted 2012-11-21 03:21 AM

Cities are less high than our love
when we walk our kisses
as small ruffled doggies
in avenues wider than maids.

The voices of the passers-by are cats
that we would like to caress a few seconds,
before cars crush them,
they are mysteries which bring out their claws.

It is better to hide in our apartments,
in our beds which speak all the languages,
I returned of Mexico a kiss
which plays the guitar and bites iguanas,

My sadness jumped into a taxi, as a madman,
spoke about your eyes crushed by a reckless driver,
cities are less high than our love,
they wait that we cherish them and striking,

As these planes which take off from airports
and go out of my heart without ever returning...

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

1 posted 2012-11-21 08:49 AM

Yann, this is so sensitively and exquisitely beautiful and rich – every word, every line, every metaphor. I love it (except for the cats being crushed or the iguanas being bitten, but I understand that those things aren’t necessarily actually happening in the poem, and I understand the important role that those parts play in the poem). Yet, the poem is so excruciatingly sad, that it scrunches up my insides and leaves me breathless and motionless. Its ambiance and images will remain with me long after I have pressed Submit Reply on this entry.

Owl

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2012-11-26 02:18 AM

Your poetry always shows how sensitive you are to the ways of the world, yann. That's what makes a poet.
Ida

Ethern
Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 150
on a plane

3 posted 2012-11-29 06:20 PM

where's the like button?

martiniat8
Senior Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

4 posted 2012-12-01 05:57 AM

Nice one, yann!
Your imagery is so unique.

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

5 posted 2012-12-07 07:28 AM

I love the lines "the beds that speak all languages and also the planes that fly out of our hearts without returning." So very true. Loved it!

~Victoria~

Love: A temporary insanity curable by marriage. by Ambrose Bierce

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

6 posted 2012-12-08 12:33 PM

"In our beds which speak all languages"

Great line that. You have keen perception. I could almost a sax crying as I read this. Nicely done.

Michael

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

7 posted 2012-12-08 12:42 PM

thanks diana, sorry for the cats and iguanas, your comment is very touching and graceful, i al proud that you loved the poem, thanks for the very supportive comment

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

8 posted 2012-12-08 12:43 PM

hello ida, i heven't read you since such a long time, enjoyed that,

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

9 posted 2012-12-08 12:44 PM

thanks ethern to press rhe "like " button, enjoyed the humor

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

10 posted 2012-12-08 12:45 PM

thanks martiniat fro reading and commenting, loved it

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

11 posted 2012-12-08 12:46 PM

thanks victoria for the lovely and supportive comment

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

12 posted 2012-12-08 12:47 PM

thanks michel, your comment touched me with grace and musical emotion too, enjoyed a lot

yann

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