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We ( The plural of I )
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
We ( The plural of I ) We, firmly pressed one against the other, me, standing behind, my arms around her waist, my right cheek at her left ear, and a whisper on my lips… ‘I’ve missed you…’ I could feel her face flush red, her hands on my arms tightened, she smiled and puckered a kiss turning her head gathering in a breath and said… ‘And I, you too, darlin’ We, stood barefoot on the cool beach, looking intently out to sea, like-minded of this year’s fall seeming so unfamiliar, almost strange to commonsense, yet pleasing, as we were together again… We, were apart for weeks and months, which seemed as years and years, time gone, poorly spent, wasted away, choosing thoughts to speak… yet, words gone to particles of moist air, too soon vanished… We, promising to return to this point this cool sandy promenade, to reunite again. Even if we, are only in my thoughts and sleepless dreams… . . . Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ah, JL, you had me going and you had to bust the bubble and let reality sneak into the picture. Well, maybe someday, huh, buddy? ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed this fine writing...James |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Love it!! The end really made it !!! j. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Nicely done, we all have those kind of thoughts and dreams once in a while. Enjoyed. ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thanks, Jerry! Sorry ‘bout the bubble bustin’ ----- James, you honor me with your reply, thank you!! ---- Mr. J… Thanks, bud. Glad you liked the ending. ----- Thank you, V, for your kind thoughts; glad you stopped in to read. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
ah another one of those 'dream catcher' poems that make me wish that I could dream...wonderful |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thank you, luminosity!! Dreaming is a beautiful event. You can dream, it's the remembering that's hard to do. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Lovely, JL. I used to dream when I believed but then I woke up. There are, by the way, many ways of waking up. Reality catches dreams and swallows them sometimes swiftly and sometimes slowly but swallow them it does. Sad but true. Hope you are well. Helen |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thank you, Helen. Yep, I understand, but what the heck.... I love it anyway! Live, love, laugh, enjoy, and be thankful rain or shine. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
JL-You had me going too, but I was ready for the ending. It was truly beautiful. lori |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thank you Lori!! I do appreciate it! JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Wel done, JL. Ida |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thank you Ida!! JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Love the romance, and the whole feel to this. You and your work often leave me holding my breath. Lovely what you wrote, JL~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thank you dear BluesSerenade lady!! JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
It was sweet, like a soft dream. I enjoyed every word and every line. It was perfect, love it all. Happy Holidays |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thank you Ken!! JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Such dreams keep us going. I love this... both the romance and the reality! *S* |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
suthern, thank you for being so kind. You need to get your poetic juices flowing and write/post. Again, thanks! JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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