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Open Poetry #48

tanka: no longer a child

flash
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since 2010-11-28

Posts 213
miami beach, florida

0 posted 2012-02-08 05:15 PM

no longer a child
the G.I. Joe
I used to dress
in combat fatigues
no longer a toy

--Al

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-02-08 05:35 PM

Excellent!

At a cocktail party, one woman said to another,
'Aren't you wearing your wedding ring on the wrong finger?'
'Yes, I am. I married the wrong man.'

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

2 posted 2012-02-08 07:13 PM

Very good.

A

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2012-02-08 08:10 PM

Some things transform us forever. You express this so efficiently.

Great tanka.

Margherita

flash
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since 2010-11-28

Posts 213
miami beach, florida

4 posted 2012-02-09 04:40 AM

Jerry, Alison, Margherita:

Thanks for your generous comments.

Yes, as I grow up, I now see G.I Joe not as a toy, but as a representation of all the soldiers who fight in pointless wars that are smokescreens for greed and political favour.

Al

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

5 posted 2012-02-09 06:25 AM

That is how I perceived this, and it left me feeling solemn; it is so well done. I didn't want to say that though and inadvertently offend.

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

6 posted 2012-02-09 07:45 AM

Yeah, and it is a good thing that we do grow-up;
and realize that sometimes we fight and live
or die, or become fodder for the elite.
Many "no longer a child" went to defend
and lost doing their job, many lived, I celebrate both!
God Bless all the G.I. Joe men and women.
From the founding of the U.S. to today.

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

flash
Member

since 2010-11-28

Posts 213
miami beach, florida

7 posted 2012-02-10 03:04 PM

Nicole, JL: Thanks for your generous comments and glad this resonates deeply with you--as it does me.

Al

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