Open Poetry #48 |
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..suffering poets--Revision of 'having to wait' |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada ![]() |
this is not a true revision because seems i'm going to keep both versions ..suffering poets they say the more one suffers the greater a poet one will be now, what gems will my corns evoke ~~ ..(C)2012 Spiros Zafiris ~~ ORIGINAL VERSION: ..having to wait can't say I suffered enough today... I'll have to wait until torment resounds for rapt odes to hold sway ~~ ..(C)2012 Spiros Zafiris ~~ |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
I enjoyed both poems, Spiros, as they are. Ms. E |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..thank you much Ms. E... ..spiros ~~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hah! Never mind the roids, eh, Spiros. Liked the first one better. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Ok, Spiros, the meaning you wanted to convey is clear. Emotions drive the poets no doubt to bring out the best. May you not suffer too much, but always feel deeply, whether it is pain or joy that "rages" in your heart. Both versions are very good, yet I love my personal interpretation of the first one best. ![]() Margherita |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..thanks again, Jerry and Margherita..i am quite fond of version1 too.. ..spiros ~~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
The first was good. The second timeless. Well done, and both are keepers. Michael |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..thanks much, Michael, for your take on these two versions.. ..spiros ~~ |
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