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Lady Goodman
Member

since 2012-10-04

Posts 193

0 posted 2012-10-06 09:20 PM

One wave rolls away
then another takes its place.
Some star leaves a trace
just before the morning wakes
One man needs a break
and a baby boy is born
so to keep some old bones warm
and carry on his name--

Refrain.
(carry on a name)

The Same.

Did you think we played for keeps?
We were castles on the beach.
We whispered our cliche';
walked naked into waves
against a wall of blame
as if we could defy
the puzzle of the tide
and carry on the same

refrain.

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

1 posted 2012-10-06 09:34 PM

really good/effective writing !

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-10-06 09:47 PM

This is a heavy bit of writing. I particularly liked,

"as if we could defy
the puzzle of the tide
and carry on the same"

the secret then if the puzzle of the tile.quote The times had, of course, been blamed for a myriad of things, why not life gone wrong?

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2012-10-07 08:34 PM

Very well done, Lady Goodman.
Ida

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

4 posted 2012-10-07 09:11 PM

"One wave rolls away
then another takes its place."

The days of life in a sentence. Very well done, my friend.

j.

Lady Goodman
Member

since 2012-10-04

Posts 193

5 posted 2012-10-07 09:17 PM

Thank you all very much.

I go to bed very early these days, though, but I do hope to return the favor of your time.

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

6 posted 2012-10-15 10:16 PM

Well done,
Ms. E

r v wooo
Senior Member

since 2007-08-07

Posts 656

7 posted 2012-10-16 11:42 AM

Hmmm, to come and go...to come and go...you have expressed it well.

Lady Goodman
Member

since 2012-10-04

Posts 193

8 posted 2012-10-16 08:16 PM

And I am still The Same, if just a bit ragged from high tide.

Thank you for reading, and I'd like to ask that you all check out the Poetry Challenge forum--Stephanos is asking for acrostics, and I have a little venture of fun of my own.

My love to you all.

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