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CastleGuard
Senior Member

since 2003-04-30

Posts 760
Alberta, Canada

0 posted 2012-09-24 03:45 AM

I have been drifting off to distant lands
In search of One whose passion will with mine
Entwine; one of gracious heart, gentle hands,
Of tender thoughts devoid of poisoned brine
That embitters lovers’ nest, summons strife.
Still, most will turn to more exotic plays —
But I’ve grown tired of such wasted life,
Of the sorrow, and of the twisted ways.
So let Your mirage shimmer and free wield
My heart, do leave this dreamy flight unscathed.
Oh, but fair maiden, be forewarned - my shield
Has lost its sheen, my coat of arms unpraised:
Should still Your heart with mine align, then raise
The veil - entwined let our passion blaze.

CG

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

1 posted 2012-09-24 04:47 AM

The veil just melted ;-)

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-09-24 05:58 AM

Really like this, CastleGuard, it said much and the rhyming was excellent.

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

3 posted 2012-09-24 10:29 AM

I like the reference to the upraised shield. It's so often our body language tlles one story that is in complete disunity with what our heart is dying for. Love the fairytale feel to this as well.

Michael

CastleGuard
Senior Member

since 2003-04-30

Posts 760
Alberta, Canada

4 posted 2012-09-27 01:58 AM

ARH - glad the intent had the desired effect...lol.

Jerry - thank you for the words of appreciation.

Michael - thank you for reading and the observation.

CG

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

5 posted 2012-09-27 04:08 PM

Romantic and magical...two wonderful combinations...well done...the vision is beautiful...Alberta has a great talent in you...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

CastleGuard
Senior Member

since 2003-04-30

Posts 760
Alberta, Canada

6 posted 2012-09-28 01:22 AM

Karen - thank you for stopping by and leaving such uplifting words...much appreciated.
CG

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2012-09-28 09:59 AM

This is just gorgeous... Beautiful, flowing and so very romantic!

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

8 posted 2012-09-28 10:02 PM

finely 'penned' indeed !

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