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Like They Used To
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Like They Used To |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida 
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it is still outside today, and hot and the shade is not dappled, so much as it is like a living, moving thing. something with thought and a thirst for more than sun bleached lawn furniture. it moves around in shivers; i sit through the dance and endure the exposure. maybe the heat will peel back my skin, where i am only empty bones instead of the trembling, frightful thing i have become. a grumpy old man came by to visit and i found him to be delightful. he made fun of golfers, while i smoked; blowing little gray ashes and gnats. and he said he was catholic but wasn't going to no faacking cataclysm. i thought, this is what i am and what is to become of me? i was sad to see him go, in his little white truck and old veterans cap perched jaunty and high. he said i was beautiful and girls just didn't smoke like they used to. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I loved this. I put myself in the old man's place. This was a dark piece, but when taken altogether it came out as something you could sink your teeth in and come out with something worthwhile. I am still fantasizing about putting myself in the old man's place. I'm sure he will return when you need him again. It's good to see you again. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Thank you Jerry.  He is great. I enjoy our visits, and he seems to put things in perspective in ways that I haven't even thought of. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Old guys who have been around can do that for you. Your friend seems like a keeper. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
I don't call them "old guys" but "wise men"...I know a couple of them...well written...*BIG HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I apologize for calling them old guys. 'Nuff said. Can't win for losing. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Jerry, definitely. I can't remember how it goes; he's forgotten more than I'll ever know? Something like that. Star - half-dozen in one, 6 in the other, I suppose? Or maybe it sounds better to say, "What's in a name? That which we call a rose by any other name would still smell as sweet." Either way, it's something I value. Thanks |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I can relate to both sides of this piece, and think it very well spoken, my friend. Much enjoyed the read. j. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
I can hear the cogwheels turning in your head. I relate to this, as j wrote, on both sides. Sounds like my oldest daughter, and, sounds like me some years back speaking to my dad. Enjoyed the read, Nicole. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
A fine snapshot of your day nicole,enjoyed the view,thank you. Goldenrose. music was my refuge.i could crawl into the spaces between the notes and curl my back to loneliness - Maya Angelou |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You are such a fine writer, what a wonderful piece of poetry!!! |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
j - thanks, i'm glad you could see both sides JL - the cogs can get kinda loud up here, sometimes  Goldenrose - it actually turned into an ok afternoon, once the breeze kicked in a bit. thanks Blues - thankya lovely |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Moppet...cool views of the gap between yesterday and tomorrow..anything that makes you smoke can't be too bad. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Nicole, start asking him more questions... keep notes... he's an icon and maybe only you know... |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Ddy - I can definitely think of a few things, want to help? Karilea - His name is Murphy, but I call him Murph. He's 87 years old, and mows the lawn for certain people because it's fun and he's just that kinda guy. I'm just about the only one that'll ask him anything, because the man does have a mouth on him, but I love it. Plus, he says I make good sweet tea (I use sugar instead of crystallized carcinogens). It's a win/win. |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..hello..i read this poem hours ago (yesterday?)..vaguely remember it..should read it tomorrow, again..all i can say, is that you have one of the clearest voices on the Net..had much enjoyed it..>>spiros ~~ |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine 'slice of real life' writing! [It's interesting ... how many rather different 'writing styles' appear among the 'poets' here in 'P.I.P.-land' by the cyber-sea] ... |
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