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brian thomas madden
Junior Member

since 2010-07-08

Posts 32
Ireland (between an ocean and a rock)

0 posted 2012-08-24 07:34 AM

my muse whispered to me and inspired these words.. I am eternally graceful to her.

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No apple tastes so sweet as fruit she placed upon my lips
with a simple kiss, so indiscreet she stole my breath
and sold my soul, yet the heavens dwell in her divine
I will burn brighter than Valhalla for her slumber
to wake the Gods to bear witness to our love,
For you Eve, there's a storm in paradise tonight.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-08-24 08:04 AM

I really like this and am very upset with your Muse for coming up with it. So, in retrospect I have fired my Muse and am looking around for one who can put these kind of words in my thoughts.

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2012-08-25 04:44 AM

Oh, you listened well to your Muse I would say! This is very lovely and captivating.

Margherita

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2012-08-25 07:44 PM

Ah, your muse sings songs, my friend...

j.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2012-08-25 10:02 PM

Very fine writing...James

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

5 posted 2012-08-26 02:27 PM

Filled with romance and passion...I love this poem...she will open her eyes with a smile...the vision is wonderfull...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

6 posted 2012-08-26 02:56 PM

Magical and lovely...
Ms. E

brian thomas madden
Junior Member

since 2010-07-08

Posts 32
Ireland (between an ocean and a rock)

7 posted 2012-08-30 07:32 PM

Thanks to everyone for their comments, sorry just realized I forgot to add punctuation to this

No apple tastes so sweet as fruit she placed upon my lips.
With a simple kiss, so indiscreet she stole my breath
and sold my soul, yet the heavens dwell in her divine.
I will burn brighter than Valhalla for her slumber
to wake the Gods that bore witness to our love,
For you Eve, there's a storm in paradise tonight.

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