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Nigelinoz
Member

since 2012-07-24

Posts 71
Victoria,Australia

0 posted 2012-07-26 07:09 AM

Not my best work but I may rewrite later.

Tonight upon a starlight fleeting
Came to me an angels greeting
An angel came from St Peter's gate
To speak of love ,it's not too late

The angel spoke with a quiet grace
To tell me love has a gentle face
The face of love was of gods design
But I saw love when your eyes met mine

In your eyes I see a painting
Like the greatest work of art
When I see your smile
I feel like I'm fainting
Falling ever deeper
Giving you my heart.

You may as well give cherries to a pig as give advice to a fool-
Irish Proverb

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-07-26 08:04 AM

Nothing wrong with this one, but like me and millions of other poets we keep fiddling with our poems, changing a word here, taking a word or line out . . . We are never completely satisfied.

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Nigelinoz
Member

since 2012-07-24

Posts 71
Victoria,Australia

2 posted 2012-07-26 08:12 AM

Thank you for your kind comments JerryPat2.
I appreciate them.
Cheers
N'oz

You may as well give cherries to a pig as give advice to a fool-
Irish Proverb

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

3 posted 2012-07-26 12:42 PM

romantically beautiful...this poem sings out your love for her...well done...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

Nigelinoz
Member

since 2012-07-24

Posts 71
Victoria,Australia

4 posted 2012-07-26 02:45 PM

Startime1955,
Thank you-I find it hard to express my love for Denise in ordinary words,poetry seems to be the only way I can "get through to her'
I am glad that you seem to be able to see it in my poems.
Thank you for your comments and hugs.
Cheers
N'oz

You may as well give cherries to a pig as give advice to a fool-
Irish Proverb

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

5 posted 2012-08-02 08:44 PM

I see nothing wrong with this at all. Very lyrical in nature, and sound in content. I found it enjoyable.

Michael

Nigelinoz
Member

since 2012-07-24

Posts 71
Victoria,Australia

6 posted 2012-08-02 09:06 PM

Thank You Michael for your very kind comments,
I appreciate them.
Cheers
N'oz

You may as well give cherries to a pig as give advice to a fool-
Irish Proverb

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

7 posted 2012-08-07 01:20 AM

N'oz, I think this is quite lovely and I enjoyed it very much. Like the Hokey-Pokey, that's what it's all about!

Ali

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