»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #48
»
Subtle
| Open Poetry #48 |
|
Subtle |
|
|
JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
|
vibes coming from your persona enticing me 'ere you be where I can see your image sheer velveteen hips which whisper as you walk a kind of rhythm akin to seventh heaven ecstasy is your eyes catching me looking eyes with a quiet hush appraising your admirer you pass me by with a soulful saunter pausing slightly in your stride mouths to me a silent, smiling, thank you and continue on your way ©July 19, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
||
| © Copyright 2012 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine capture of a moment in Romantic Impressionism ! |
||
|
JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I appreciate the time you took to read my poem and to comment on it. Thank you, Bruce. ~*~ they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
||
|
Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Ahhh yes, the greatest feeling knowing that someone thinks you are beautiful. You caught the feeling well. |
||
|
JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I wasn't sure I pulled off the feeling the woman had as she noticed her admirer staring, until you said I did, Marilyn, thank you. ~*~ they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
||
|
Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
She couldn't help but feel beautiful...subtle indeed, my friend...*BIG HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
||
|
JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Karen . . . Hugs back . . . ~*~ they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
||
|
latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Yes, it happens once in a while and it makes each person's day. The admired and the admirer. I saw Loren Bacal here.LOL, jo |
||
|
JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yeah, it is something Becall would do alright, jo, but my thinking was a bit more low key. Just an ordinary housewife, if she knows she's "got it," can pull this off. Thanks for the comments. ~*~ they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
||
|
Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
You nailed it dead on my friend! Perfect! Lori  |
||
|
JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I think so too, Lori, thank you. ~*~ they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
