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Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2012-07-13 12:48 PM

How do I breathe
in this yawning abyss
as the darkness surrounds
the loss of your kiss

How do I move
with this burden of pain
a heart torn apart
your freedom the gain

My soul was the price
paid willingly for love
you answered my prayers
were sent from above

Now here I lay
in the ashes of hope
not really sure
if it's worth it to cope

Scooter
Member

since 2012-07-10

Posts 68

1 posted 2012-07-13 01:24 PM

As you said to moi, I relate.

"The way to crush the bourgeoisie is to grind them between the millstones of taxation and inflation."-Vladimir Lenin

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

2 posted 2012-07-13 02:12 PM

Such pain...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

LivingConfused
Junior Member

since 2009-12-27

Posts 40

3 posted 2012-07-13 06:05 PM

I love both the title and verse. This is a great place to discover you are not alone. The people here helped me reach the other side sadness.

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2012-07-13 06:29 PM

Thank you all for reading my poems. This happened yesterday...well I found out yesterday that my fiancée was cheating.

Living...I am familiar with these boards...I was here when netpoets was just a baby. We are old friends.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

5 posted 2012-07-13 08:00 PM

Marilyn

This is very lyrical and flows so nicely.

Love these lines,
"Now here I lay
in the ashes of hope"

Good work!

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2012-07-17 01:26 PM

Oh, this hurts just to read. I'm so sorry for your pain!

Namyh
Senior Member

since 2009-01-20

Posts 988

7 posted 2012-07-18 05:17 PM

Marilyn - The heartbreak is evident and your verbal portrayal collides with our emotions. I love the craft of your talented pen. Keep the faith because life has a way of turning on a dime and putting a smile back on your face when you least expect it. Namyh

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2012-07-18 10:25 PM

Fine writing...lots of feelings here...James

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

9 posted 2012-07-18 11:03 PM

I can't say I had anything to do with writing this piece except that it was my fingers on the pen as it poured out of my soul.

Thank you all for you lovely replies.

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