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Blacktop Moaning
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Blacktop Moaning |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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 (This nostalgic piece was written about those long, lonesome decades when I was truly a loner and a man without a future.) blacktop moaning from the heat looks like steam coming from a kettle each day longer than the one before I walk awhile, kicking cans out of my way stop, stick out my thumb cuss those who drive by without even a look my thumb is as tired and worn as is my soul this is purgatory this is the faux entrance to hell I'm going nowhere I've nowhere left to go I'm bound by this blasted blacktop moaning and I'm tired, so utterly tired a whiff of perfume of women I've had in nice places away from the blacktop moaning some of them whispered those three little words sometimes I whispered 'em back not meaning them don't think most of them meant 'em either still, I always left back to the blacktop moaning there would be others I'd be unable to remain with them also its the blacktop moaning that owned this man keeping on hanging on my heart damaged beyond repair will there never be someone for me that I can love back its as if I've a tattoo across my forehead STOP . . . LOOK . . . BEWARE this one is tainted this one is eat up with blacktop moaning chasing the setting sun nowhere to call home he just walks along that meandering blacktop moaning alone searching for eyes that will make him dance like a butterfly until then he walks the blacktop moaning the tattoo has now moved into his soul ©June 9, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
The black top seems to moan for many a soul always has and still does for some. Glad you are off the black top, JP. Well written, JP! Ms. E |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Oh, Ms. E, so am I glad I'm removed from that wandering life. How I survived is still a mystery to me. Thank you for your kind words. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
Oh my gosh...this poem paints a very lonely vision...What a sad life to live...I am so glad you found love and a place to call home...*BIG HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Oh, Karen, thank you, you're sweet, and I am grateful I'm no longer bound to the damned blacktop moaning. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Rockin' title! I love tunes and poems about heartache drifters, nice guys still trying to cross the finish line long after everyone has scattered. Very well written and very engaging for a loser rider like me. Oh and please say hi to Sal Paradise for me when you're out there on those moaning roads, woncha ya? |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Appreciate the camaraderie soul drifter, and the next time I'm close enough to Sal Paradise, I'll definitely give him your regards, and maybe he'll put in a good word to Jack for both of us. Thanks again for the cool comments. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'm going nowhere I've nowhere left to go And still you kept moving... I'm glad you've found a place to stay... a place where you hear sighs of contentment instead of the blacktop's lonely moan. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, suthern, and I, too am happy I found my place in this world. I appreciate your comments. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Ah, you old road dog you. I loved this. It reminded much of something called Road Dog I once did: "Cause the world, well she's my lover And the road, hell, that's my home." It's funny to look back and see the desperation I had no idea was driving me back then. This poem made me feel it. kudos Michael |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Appreciate it, Michael. I see you have a novel ready for me to read, I guess I'd better get to it. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Saw you out there and felt the road, my friend... I've a weary thumb too, and wouldn't trade the experience for anything. Much enjoyed the read, and the feel... well written. j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
thanks j. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
A moving piece, Jerry, and I'm so glad that your road finally lead somewhere. Maybe you survived because you've got a guardian angel - yeah, one that likes to play tricks like mine does.  Helen |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sad I tell you this is sad.....but then, you're who you are now so it's glad that I am for you. Black Top Moaning now there's a hook for a good blues song. Amazing how we all come up through it in so many different ways. Complete turn around is usually a mellow state of mind and it's a comfortable place to be. I personally think it even stirs the creative juices more than [Profanity removed - Ron] .....just my opinion though. Great stuff Jerry! Eric true love never looks after it's own interests [This message has been edited by Ron (07-02-2012 01:09 PM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Appreciate you kindness, Helen. Even fools sometimes stops long enough to figure out which road will be the right one for him. Thank you for your kindness. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Oh I agree that this is defiantly sad, Eric. But you are right it made me who I am today, whether that is good or bad is anybody's guess. I'm blues orientated, but have just never had the knack for writing songs. Hah! Yeah, you're right again about it stirring the creative juices. Thank you for being so kind with your comments. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
You captured this one perfectly...the heat and the heartache. Bravo! Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yep. Good to see you, Lori, and thank you. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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