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Bleak and Bliss
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Bleak and Bliss |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Bleak and Bliss On the slope of a hilltop, a steep mountain did drop down to the rapids of a river named Syn. Panic in the rain's roar plunged on its slanted floor. Bleak, on a horse of bones, galloped down the wind. Behind, Greed and Envy rode their palomino steeds with Wrath next to Lust, and Chaos in the night. To a town called Choice raced Bleak and his marauders 'cross a moon where horses shine skinless in the light. Daylight would be coming soon, sizzling hot the sand dunes. Faith, Hope and Charity waited dawn's light to kiss. Their horses neighed a cry ! Love and Justice looked to sky. On the rays thrown from Sun like a fist galloped Bliss. On streaks of sultry sizzling sand, his horse Sunlight burned red. Bliss waved a hand and beckoned with a blast of booming voice. Off the sand dune they did heed, self-propelled by hoofs of speed, to catch Sunlight's blistered blaze now inbound and aimed for Choice. And flickering 'cross horizon stars betwixt the moonlight's beams and bars, Bleak and Bliss rode prairies 'til they reached a half-mile gap. Seeing Choice ahead, they tightened reins to jump that impasse half-mile gain, and fearless leaped the chasm, hoofs in air, landing pat. Our human halves of Bleak and Bliss are flaws and strengths we would commit to reach a Choice that we need make requires always....some Leap of Faith. Namyh [This message has been edited by Namyh (06-18-2012 05:19 PM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
This is good enough to become a classic. You juxtaposed good and evil and greed and love and justice, among others perfectly and the poem hit a mighty grand slam with the last verse. I'll be saving this one to my library. Damn good writing, Namyh. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Yes, very true it does require that leap. Good summation for the ending. Great stuff! Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
I love the flow of this poem and the thoughts that spun through my head at the reading...with hope and faith anything is possible...perfectly written...*BIG HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Our human halves of Bleak and Bliss are flaws and strengths we would commit to reach a Choice that we need make requires always....some Leap of Faith. How very true! And what a beautiful tale you wove to tell this truth! *S* |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
JerryP – Nothing like a little reality between the eyes with a grand slam last verse to make the day. I’m honored this merits placement in your library. Now you got me feeling like a ‘classic’ and that’s novel to me. Thanks JP. Namyh Eric – Without the leap, we’d still be hesitating on the ledge. Thanks for the ‘great stuff’ Eric. Among the possible endings, this one seem to work best. Glad you liked it. Namyh |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Startime – Spinning thoughts mixed with hope and faith. I couldn’t ask for more. Thanks S. Namyh Suthern – Wherever we go and however we get there, we always take our good and bad with us for those choices we must make. Glad my loom was working so I could weave this tale for you. Namyh |
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