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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2013-08-09 04:49 PM

I was pinching
my much overgrown
and sparsely blossomed
Santa Claus Red Petunias
Musing over my negligence
their constant maintenance
and consistent points of life
At the very edges of death
I was removing
renewal was starting
Promising abundant
re-budding after
impatiently waiting
throughout the green
A louder shout out
to hummingbirds
snubbing our feeder
Clippings fall on bare feet
so impromptu a session
I'd forgotten the waste bin
Seeking sienna twisted crisp
with my scissors I clip
“pinching” I “pulled”
more green than brown
And in my musings
some food for thought
on my love of home
the patience for
the joy of color
perspective on
death and life
And I found
this poem

LGR(C)8/9/13

swampguy
Member

since 2013-08-04

Posts 83

1 posted 2013-08-09 05:40 PM

quote:
and I found this poem

And the poem is you and you are the poem. It all resonates within the structure of nature's gift for continuing to live despite some concentrated malingering of the gardener. Nice work . . .

~*~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2013-08-09 05:45 PM

Thank you much my friend.

Lori

Alicat
Member Elite

since 1999-05-23

Posts 4094
Coastal Texas

3 posted 2013-08-09 08:12 PM

Inspired piece from yardwork, with poignant imagery. There was a bit of confusion regarding line breaks; capitalization helped, but lack of punctuation was a detriment. In short, I almost had to catch my breath from the stream of consciousness gardening rant.

That said, I do like this one, as I could easily see each action taken, each sight seen, each thing heard. Very vicarious, if you catch my meaning.

Alicat

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2013-08-10 08:48 AM

Alicat- Thanks for the heads up on the line breaks. You will find I rarely if ever use punctuation. I would suggest also that you consider sipping my poetry and not gulping it down. Some of my pieces slow down when read outloud too.

Glad you are enjoying my work.

Lori

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