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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2012-06-01 08:12 PM

you would not know I was here
my face is everyman's face
my breath lingers in dark toilets
as you pull the long string for light

my eyes are oval and cold
as eyes on old men's oil-on-canvass
somehow just off center a tad
not noticeable in the dark

loitering near the corner
a cipher to the passerby's
I can stand there for hours
pigeons eye me suspiciously

but not you in the evenings shade
I stand mottled by the half sun
the day is becoming darker
I blend in like another shadow

I never speak, even when spoken to
by passersby's passing the time of day
they turn up their collars and hurry on
something tells them to not look back

who am I, have you already guessed
names mean next to nothing in my world
I'm the man nobody sees
but feels a presence when they pass by

I'm a hired killer, waiting for my mark
that's why I stand here for so long
as if I've missed my ride
I'm like a piece of household furniture

I'm here at the corner where you walk
each afternoon - they can set a clock by you
you make a left at the next block
don't bet on making that left turn today

©May 17, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (06-01-2012 09:31 PM).]

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

1 posted 2012-06-01 09:46 PM

Okay...I scare very easily but this poem gave me shivers up my spine...great writing but erie...*HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-06-01 09:50 PM

I am sorry, Karen, that it grossed you out. Well, actually you didn't use those words. I do different kinds of poetry. Life is not all peaches and cream. I have calmed down my writing, or you would really have something complain about. Thank you for being here anyway, even though the subject was not to your liking.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Startime1955
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since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

3 posted 2012-06-01 09:53 PM

Hey...it was to my liking... it was written so well I was captivated and to do that with something scary is an amazing feat...you keep writing in whatever way you want and I will keep reading...to say it...I love it...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2012-06-01 09:54 PM

Thank you, Karen, I misunderstood, my friend. (((hugs back))))

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

5 posted 2012-06-02 04:10 AM

Man's greatest enemy that still plagues all those left behind.

This is superb writing, fascinating subconscious awareness! Yep, it's a reality that none can avoid.
You are very good at this type of writing as I have mentioned before.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2012-06-02 06:27 AM

Appreciate your comments, Eric. You are so right, the ones left behind live with that horrendous act the rest of their lives.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

7 posted 2012-06-02 07:27 AM

Yes indeed you do dark very well...chilling!

Lori

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

8 posted 2012-06-02 07:30 AM

Be careful, Lori, be very careful. Thanks for showing up.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

9 posted 2012-06-02 07:33 AM

Fascinating write, Jerry.
Ida

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

10 posted 2012-06-02 09:03 AM

A scene that could fit perfectly well into any thriller, Jerry! Suspense is there and fear creeps along the lines ... wheewww!

Ok, my intuition tells me that tomorrow I'll change my route ...

Very impressive.

Margherita

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

11 posted 2012-06-02 09:22 AM

Thank you, Ida, for taking the scare with me.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

12 posted 2012-06-02 09:23 AM

You are wise in making that decision, Margherita. Thanks for taking the fear factor with me.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

13 posted 2012-06-02 10:05 AM

I like mystery novels. This poem reads like the introduction of a good mystery novel.
Nice, JP,
Ms. E

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

14 posted 2012-06-02 10:09 AM

Come to think about it, it does sound like the beginning of a mystery/thriller, Ms. E. You may have lit a fire. I'm working on a novel at the present, and have another one waiting in the wings, but this idea is a good one and just may replace it. Thank you dearly for your input.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

15 posted 2012-06-02 07:43 PM

Nice...James

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

16 posted 2012-06-02 08:15 PM

Thanks...Jerry

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

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