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ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2012-01-29 09:54 AM

When I am lost,
And the space between seems moon distant,
Her scent still lingers in the cloth of my shirt;
I know her by this, from every other.

Adjusted eyes, become lenses then
Projecting negatives on a mind screen.
A portrait Impression, painted on velvet-
Muscle-red, and purple--
She being always heartclose.

But once ungone, and two make a house
A lovers home--we share fingertouch
And gentlerub-making friction caused by choice.

Arousal scrapes, a matchspurts, brimstone
Causing smoke--passions candle being lit
Stokes the brighter flame of Eros,
That only mix of human-fluids can snuff out.

Then, in the thin-dark of after
Her head in my arm cradle,
Cloudy feelings, still aglow-
We teeter
On the precipice of sleeps-cliff,

And any embers still Burning
Are put out of a sudden;
As The fires that brightened
The wonders of night
(And terrors of being unclose)
Disappear in the realm of somnolent,

Quenched by drowsy.

[This message has been edited by ice (01-30-2012 06:05 AM).]

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

1 posted 2012-01-29 10:18 AM

This is glorious...I love the purposeful subtlety; its not coy. This:

Her scent still lingers in the cloth of my shirt;
I know her by this, from every other.

makes me sigh, that is lovely; and the way you closed the poem, especially.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-01-29 10:30 AM

"Stokes the bright flames of eros,
That only mix of human-fluids can snuff out."

Yes. Yes. Yes.

~*~ I gave up feeling guilty just to survive a long time ago ~*~

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

3 posted 2012-01-29 04:38 PM

Ice,
So sensual, enjoyed you drowsey.
Ms. E

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

4 posted 2012-01-30 03:51 AM

Oh my what a cleverly crafted sensual write - well done!

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
— W. E. Channing

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

5 posted 2012-01-30 07:01 AM

Nicole......Thanks for reading
The poem is subtle on purpose, not meant to be arousing. yet not coy,
as you stated. I needed to add you quoted lines to show how well I know this woman,
Her physical scent.(not perfumed, but natural)
The poem is true in every aspect.
********************************************
Jerry
There it is Jerry, to me, the most in your face lines of the poem.
Thank you for the reply.
*********************************************
EBG...Thank you for reading
The drowsey is always enjoyable..glad you enjoyed it..:-)
*********************************************
Tracie
I love when "cleverly", and "crafted" are two words in a reply.
I am playing with two words said as one, instead of the -
between to make people read them as so...it worked for ee cummings,
I just stole it from him.....:-)
Thanks for the reply.

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

6 posted 2012-02-04 12:05 PM

"And any embers still Burning
Are put out of a sudden;
As The fires that brightened
The wonders of night
(And terrors of being unclose)
Disappear in the realm of somnolent,

Quenched by drowsy."

How did I miss this one??
Excellent work. Enjoyed the flow
and immersion into the act of two lovers;
and the last verse expressing that sleepy
or drowsy state I think almost everyone
can relate to.
Enjoyed!

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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