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Unto Her The Bell Has Been Rung
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Unto Her The Bell Has Been Rung |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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 her beauty is music to the soul by candlelight a goddess glow standing 'neath the full moon so lovely men have swooned when she walks among the trees she offers you wine and brie all the men that she has known drank deep from her home grown when the women see her pass behind jealous hands they sass she is that bell that has been rung a strong woman swift of tongue she is midnight obsession told she's Saturday's playfulness bold ©May 17, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Great title...and you resounded if fully within the poem. Excellent work, Jerry... one of my favorites now... |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Have to agree with Karilea on this one. I love it! Lori  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Quite the pic Jerry Lots of ambiguity here and I really like it. Fine writing like this. "when the women see her pass behind jealous hands they sass she is that bell that has been rung a strong woman swift of tongue" I like all the places that could go....smile.... Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Karilea for you nice comments on this poem. <><><><> Dittos to you,Lori, many thanks. <><><><> Eric, much obliged for your comments. Yes, you can take that grouping of words many places. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Enjoyed the read, Jerry. Saturday, yes, but, oh, those Saturday nights! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hah! Yeah, you're right about those Saturday nights, Honeybunch, Thank you for being here . . . ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
Brilliant...this poem sings...truth be told I would not be jealous...all she is is in her nature...I love this poem...and the picture is perfect...*HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* [This message has been edited by Startime1955 (05-22-2012 07:52 PM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
"truth be told I not be jealous...all she is is in her nature." I love that, Karen. Thank you so much for your comments and input. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Two words came to mind and..not what you might think (laughing) Seriously? Quiet majesty I curtsy |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
The words concerning poetry are subject to many image-builders, that is the magic of poetry. Thanks for dropping by. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
enjoyed...James |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you...Jerry ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Very lyrical and flowing, Jerry. Great stuff. Doncha know that women are the only works of art? |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yes, yes indeed, soul drifter, I have been aware of that for many years. Thanks for the read and comment. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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