Open Poetry #48 |
Checkout Girl |
Zall Member
since 2002-08-25
Posts 214London, England |
Beep, beep, the register scrolls Totalling his groceries and such She hands to him, a pack of rolls Their fingers slightly touch She resumes, Her hand retreats And she assumes he knows He's seen her mouth, her chin, her cheeks The reconstructed nose Indeed he's seen what the makeup covers What the young girl daily hides But he see's more than many others The warmth in her blue eyes He draws her gaze, in that way he can That roguish smile he gave Blue eyes meet his, she stops her scan She's as pretty as she's brave A smile returned vulnerable and sweet Nervously bites her lip A flutter felt, his chest, a beat The moment starts to slip She starts to scan, he packs up fast He finishes, starts to pay Their time is done, not meant to last She felt beautiful that day |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You rendered this special moment very beautifully, Aaron. A nice "come-back" to Pip! Margherita |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Enjoyed the silent message he delivered to the checkout girl. The same one she accepted with grace and joy. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Zall Member
since 2002-08-25
Posts 214London, England |
Thanks :-) Can't believe its like a decade since I was here.. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
A very special checkout girl. Very nice story. Enjoyed. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
What a wonderful moment described and the connection is superb. Funny about that connection isn't it? Good work. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
WOW!!! What a wonderful experience you gave her...very sweet and very powerful...*HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
The man in this poem is the epitome of a gentleman. Is this man you? Smiling, Enjoyed your poem, Ms. E |
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Zall Member
since 2002-08-25
Posts 214London, England |
"Is this man you?"... ahem.. might have been.. :-) Thank you all.. feels good to write a little again.. |
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voice2bheard Senior Member
since 2007-10-19
Posts 591New York |
This was very sweet! Wish I had an experience lie that when I really was "a checkout girl" for my job but great write! Kate_Mcfee (Lily's Mom) |
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Zall Member
since 2002-08-25
Posts 214London, England |
Thanks :-) |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
What a heartwarming write! *S* |
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