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a habit's handkerchief ("Shag")
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a habit's handkerchief ("Shag") |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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"What's the story?" (I like tales.) My friend told me one or two-- about the wind in slack of sail and how the boogey-men getchoo. "Really?" I was interested. "Tell me, what happened to him?" "Vietnam," and chemicals. "He comes here to look for her." Aloha Shores. I looked around at all the bamboo, slamming lights-- There, I thought, he might have found that woman who kept him in sites. It's just the sort of place that dreams backward writhing drooling screams with white around a cotton mouth drubbed by a habit's handkerchief. I watched him, swaying to the songs. I watched him watch the door. I saw him tickling the air; making love to no one there. The lights behind him grew too dim so I spoke and asked of him, "Tell me why are you so sad?" He shed a tear, then he got mad and walked away from me. "I told you not to talk to him." My guy told me, yet again. "But," I said, "He was cryin' listening to something strong..." stronger than himself. "Just don't mess around with him." I mocked my date. He ordered gin. "I'm serious, he's dangerous-- they call him Shag--his name is Glen." I shrugged at "Shag" and asked my friend to define what huge offense the man had made for such nickname-- "that one? He's just not the same.." "As me, or you, or all the damned?" "Agent Orange--Vietman." "Oh." I said. "I understand." I watched the ice melt where Shag's hand had left a drink to melt...with prints of his fingers 'round the rock glass, in widened wilting rings: I realized I knew nothing. I sucked my ice cubes dry... |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
you are Still one of the best i have ever read talent such talent |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I only hope that one day I can live up to your praise, dear friend. I am so lucky to have found such understanding and I do appreciate your forgiveness. You're still my hero. *smile* No pressure. Just love.  Thank you. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You're not a bad story-teller yourself... you catch the glare of life so well. And with compassion. And quite possibly, lend it a human quality that no one else thinks to do, for others.  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: It's like being at the theatre when something moves us and we try to dry the tears without being seen. Intensely poignant, dear Karen! Love, Margherita |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
"Oh." I said. "I understand." I watched the ice melt where Shag's hand had left a drink to melt...with prints of his fingers 'round the rock glass, in widened wilting rings: I realized I knew nothing. I sucked my ice cubes dry... I agree with Helen... you don't even know how good you are... and maybe... therein lies the magic. Magnifantasterrific! |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Forgive me when I fail to post. I am not reading as much as I should and before I realize it much has passed down. This is absolutely one of the best I have read in a while. You tell a story so true and your passion and compassion always comes through.You are one hell of a writer dear one. latearrival |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'll try this again. (I'm tired and keep typing in the wrong box.) *sheesh* But thank you all, but the credit goes to my sort of friend, "Shag"--his face is compellingly expressive--I could feel him. (That ever happen to ya'll?) *smile* I just write the stuff. Dream sweet, folks. Love to all. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I knew a couple of these casualties of Viet nam. Every bit as sad as the fate of my cousin who didn't come back at all. Ida |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I knew a couple of these casualties of Viet nam. Every bit as sad as the fate of my cousin who didn't come back at all. You are a wonderful storyteller. Ida |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
and with the current administration it only is getting tougher on those of us who are left from the University of RVN.. enjoyed your art as usual serene one.. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Yea, this is damn good lady.....hope you are doing just peachy! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well I got a 73 year old "pops" who talks about his son Shag whose real name is Matt....the tales I hear.... over and over and over and over this is good K Love it! |
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