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Open Poetry #46

Your World In Your Eyes

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2010-03-20 05:59 PM

Your World In Your Eyes

Girl it's six in the morning, daybreak dawning
and deep down but not destroyed
I'm a shadow of a love you knew
inside a ring of fire and youth
on a river of dreams passin through.

Goodnight Mr. Moon
Somewhere I used to be
I see you smilin at me.
Good morning Mr. day
I know it's time again
To be on my way.
With your world in your eyes
I just can't stay.

Girl it's about where we've been, talkin chin to chin
and all the things that matter
are in the love and truth we knew
inside a ring of fire and youth
on a river of dreams passin through.

Goodnight Mr. Love
Somewhere I used to be
Keeps you inside of me.
Good morning Mr. Day
I know it's time again
To be on my way
With your world in your eyes
I just can't stay.

With your world in your eyes
You know I can't stay!

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2010-03-20 07:12 PM

Yo Eric,

This works very nice. It's good to see your poems again.

Bobby

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2010-03-21 04:06 PM

Dear Eric, it's so nice to see you back on Pip and with such a captivating love song. Beautiful poetic expressions, with a melancholic hue.

Love,
Margherita

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2010-03-21 09:24 PM

enjoyed this my friend, especially the first stanza...

j.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

4 posted 2010-03-22 05:55 PM

Bittersweet and beautiful!!!

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

5 posted 2011-01-05 10:29 PM

very profound and beautifully written...great work!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2011-01-10 06:37 PM

Thanks all for the kind comments.

Eric

Siamese twins move to England so the other one can learn how to drive!

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