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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Holidays come, holidays go The pace too fast and then too slow I'm left alone when said and done They eat and run, they eat and run Gone, bundled up to see the lights Strung razzle-dazzle, Christmas night's Pure wonder blazed in bulbs of white And fancy's flight, and fancy's flight Still wafting warm the scent of bread The kitchen mess fills me with dread Kids shrill and shriek, oh, aching head My legs are lead, my legs are lead Stack the dishes, put food away ~ The sink's gone missing in the fray I'll still be here come break of day Can't run away, can't run away Standing midst ground zero rubble Dishpan hands in soapsuds' bubble Think I'll drink to toil and trouble Make mine double, make mine double I'll sink into an easy chair Blow pixie dust as light as air Forget-me-nots drift astral streams Escape in dreams, escape in dreams Deep in the midst of Christmas blue Raindrop, tympani-silvered dew To make things right (my world askew) I think of you, I think of you [This message has been edited by Klassy Lassy (01-10-2010 01:41 AM).] |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This was too great! I loved not only the melancholy, but also the humor, and hope. It sure is over fast isn't it?  |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
LOL... Sometimes if you don't laugh, you cry. I did both over the holidays and am not sorry to finally be out of the kitchen for a while.  Thanks for the read and for the astute observations! ~ Karen |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
What a spectacular monotetral!! This is wonderful, clever, witty, with near-perfect construction...wish I could find a woman with those qualities!!! Great work, Lassy, and a pleasure to read  |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Well, like Elsie Sietsma, I'm not "svelte where the moonslight's bewitchin', but oh the proposals I've had in my kitchen!" ...you can still kiss the cook!  Thank you, Balladeer |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Oh Klassy One, This is wonderful - from the title to the very last line. I'd hand carry you a double if I could for the sheer enjoyment I got from this poem. You expressed my feelings of Christmas too - and I felt as if I were peeking through a poetry window. I think I was! I love this poem. A |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Awww! Alison, thank you, Sweetheart! Peek in anytime you want. I love having you and have enjoyed your window, too! Families have their own traditions, and I can't imagine no hubbub in this little house at Christmas. We may have to rent a hall if we keep multiplying, though  Karen |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
May the spirits of the hearth watch over you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this made me smile, but the last line just broke my heart |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Klassy Lassy - this is a great write of the times around the holidays. Christmas is one of my favorite holidays, lot's of work, but good company and good feelings... BC |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Icebox, thank you for the blessing and for reading. The word "hearth" is really amazing in the words it contains. I've been fascinated by it for a long time, because not only is it a place to hold warmth, it also is a summons. " ear, earth, heart, art;" and it's only one letter away from health! What spirit, indeed! [This message has been edited by Klassy Lassy (01-11-2010 09:10 PM).] |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Dixie We have to let love pick up the pieces sometimes, yes? Thank you for reading.  |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Bill, Yes, that's what makes it so special, especially when it's an opportunity to be with those who aren't always nearby. It's also really nice not to always be locked into one role which is taken for granted-- that what we do is not the sum total of who we are. Thank you for sharing.  |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
The last paragraph really slew me. I love to read you. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
 It's so nice to get the feed back, the smiles, and the criticisms. I once thought no one would ever see my poems, much less care to read them. Thank you, Guy! |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
I am jealous of your intelligent ability to rhyme. It is a skill I cannot seem to develop. That said, I liked this loads. I could use a double too. :-) Paul Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Thank you for the kudos!  I gravitate to rhyme. A professor challenged me to write free verse, but I struggle trying to keep the spontaneity and unique edge that seems to come so naturally to you. Free verse is less constrained and has character and depth when it's done well. At his suggestion, I began to keep longhand journals to encourage brain storming and fresh expression. It was a good idea, but how vulnerable and mute I felt. I burned them in frustration one day. Bad move! I like both the warmth and the diversity of experience here, so much....Karen |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
I too, seem to gravitate to rhyme. Just my personal preference. Although, I do love to see the free verse stuff like Viking metal does so well. Too bad you burned those journals(what the hell were you thinking? lol)... that would be cool to see what was within those. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Guy, I would fragment...and I wasn't thinking, just reacting. You have to focus to write poetry and to journal with any success. I would go a hundred different directions at once. No discipline at all, which I needed to keep from scattering. You know that saying, "It's better to be silent and thought stupid than to open your mouth and remove all doubt." That's the way I felt. We had open critiques in the class. The students were much harsher than the professor about what they didn't like or what they thought didn't work, and they would pick a poem or a story to shreds. My face would actually burn...until I realized that it was simply the result of being individual, coming from different perspectives and the experiences of each. It was also an exercise in humility and tolerance, so that I was forced to look at what could be improved. I met marvelous writers and my world opened a little more, but I was intimidated by the talent and didn't think of my journals at that point as being an indicator of improvement or a source of inspiration. It wasn't easy backing off to a place of objectivity. Live and learn! Anyone who writes, needs not to be speaking into a vacuum. The poetry sites have been marvelous in helping me that way. ~Karen |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Indeed Karen. I can't tell you how much it helps to not only write your thoughts down, but to send them out to the ether space and share with others. And then, if someone is of like mind, and understands and 'gets' you, wow, that is the ultimate in sharing, of minds entwining and being not so alone in the universe. |
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