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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Forcing Heaven ~ Some days the loneliness is so palpable that it becomes the want turning itself outside, inside seething the survival that hides how dead I've become. ~ They say that if you stare at something long enough the eyes mold it into desire. Perhaps if I rip my heart out and stare at it long enough I'll finally feel. ~ So, run the blade through the belly of a mocking sky - bleed heaven down it's blissful secrets on loveless limbs and stone rock skin. I'm tired of waiting. ~ By Melissa Long-Monette |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
If you stare at something long enough you can mold it into your desire. So rip my heart out that I may look upon it. What a unique idea! I found this refreshingly different. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
"Working with children, Reading & writing poetry, Sports, All genres of music & Travelling" Your post was well written and well thought out.But too sad for me. I checked your info and I see you have many interest.I really hope you are not as depressed as you sound in this post. I undersand sometimes we write sad, but I find it do es nothing to help the situation.You have so much ahead of you and it is up to you to think positive and use your talents to lift yourself up. Just my opinion. best to you, latearrival |
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StarlitMind Junior Member
since 2010-03-17
Posts 12New England |
There are some really cool soft rhymes and images in there, and I agree with Earl Brinkman, that middle stanza was wicked. I really enjoyed it. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you all  latearrival: Thank you for your concern hun Luckily, I am not depressed at all! lol I am positive and trust in Jesus that things will work out; but since I just broke up from a serious relationship and we were planning on getting married, I thought that it would be fitting to revise this old poem of mine and re-post it Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! [This message has been edited by Honeybee (03-18-2010 10:55 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
"Perhaps if I rip my heart out and stare at it long enough I'll finally feel." perhaps not. I have been looking at mine for quite a long time now |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan |
Poetry is a mirror of our emotions placed outwards for all to see. Both the sad and happy. Keep writing what you feel and posting, cause I sure do enjoy reading them. Z. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Honeybee, Stone hard skin is the best kind of skin a person can have. Don't knock it. Love Bobby |
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