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viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2010-03-02 11:54 AM

I bent hyacinths into words
and put them on paper in attempts to draw love in letters
convincing you to read them in sequence and fall for me
fall for me with no remorse.

I poured an expensive beer on paper
and wrote in it with my desire for you.
not even only for your flower,
but for your mind and eyes
for your eyes that shine bright like the sea
just before a storm hits.

I wrote a poem for you
in expensive beer, desire, and hyacinths
it read that I will be the storm in your eyes
the desire that shook the walls of the earth
with every beat of our hearts
I will be the blooming of the flower of attraction
and I will chip away at you.

____________________________
Falling In Love Alone.

Greeneyes poem title was the spark that ignited this poem.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

1 posted 2010-03-02 01:34 PM

viking_metal - an excellent romantic writing...

BC

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

2 posted 2010-03-02 02:57 PM

Thank you very much, kind sir. I am glad you have liked my recent writings...

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

3 posted 2010-03-02 04:13 PM

Pure romanticism on display here in fine fashion (although, personally, I think it's a waste of expensive beer).

Nicely done, sir.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

4 posted 2010-03-02 04:19 PM

oh wow hi!

this is a beauty....I love the thought of all elements used to create this...

where in MN are you? I have friends from MN ....

take care....

Zeigeist
Member

since 2009-12-09

Posts 311
Michigan

5 posted 2010-03-02 05:58 PM

Yo viking dude. I have been reading your work for awhile here and have always admired your talent. Your just keep getting better and better in my belief. I have always liked your straight forward style of writing but feel you are getting more and more poetic and the depth of feeling just keeps growing. Keep writing you viking horn head and I will keep reading and enjoying.

Zeitgeist.

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

6 posted 2010-03-02 10:26 PM

Paul, this is great.
Very clever, very smooth, Very very!!

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

7 posted 2010-03-02 11:45 PM

balladeer -- Thank you sir!

I didn't say I poured the whole thing out! You rock.

Greeneyes, Thank you so very much. I'm from Stillwater, it's the mid-east portion of the state, right across the river from Hudson, Wisconsin.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

8 posted 2010-03-02 11:46 PM

Ziggy... Wow, thank you so very much! Such compliments are undeserved, but accepted. Thank you! I will keep writing, if you will keep reading.

Diamond... Thank you.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

9 posted 2010-03-03 01:41 PM

You are on a high of inspiration, dear Paul. Very creative and cute!

Love,
Margopargo

viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

10 posted 2010-03-03 01:52 PM

Thank you, margopargo, you are the very sweetest.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Klassy Lassy
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since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

11 posted 2010-03-04 03:42 AM

I think bending hyacinths into words is a violet passion, which lies softly somewhere between blue and red, waiting like clouds gathering rain to slake thirst. I had to smile at the fact you don't wait for rain, but find beer a more promising venue for romance. Spoken like a Viking!

If it weren't for the passion so sweetly set forth here, I'd think it was disappearing ink.

[This message has been edited by Klassy Lassy (03-05-2010 11:14 AM).]

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

12 posted 2010-03-04 08:57 AM

You're too kind. Thank you, Klassy.

Beer is always more promising...

P

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Chalmette Guy
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since 2009-03-11

Posts 1257
Louisiana

13 posted 2010-03-04 12:11 PM

This was awesome Paul.

I agree with Zeigeist(missing the 't')...you are delving into even more poetic depths of expression.
I wish I was back in that mode like that.
But reading stuff like this puts my mind back in that place.

Well done.

Oh, and please do not waste that expensive beer!

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

14 posted 2010-03-04 12:29 PM

I'll buy you all a round, on me, to make up for it.

Thank you chalmette, you're too kind, and I'm not worthy of such things, especially from you.

P

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

unboundpoetess
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since 2008-05-24

Posts 477

15 posted 2010-03-04 06:54 PM

Paul, you are so awesome in your humility. This rocks hard.
L,
H

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

16 posted 2010-03-05 08:07 AM

Thanks H.

I L that you like this.

L

P

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

17 posted 2010-03-05 10:37 AM

Paul,

I don't love beer so write away! I do love hyacinths and you bent them into words with skill. I would be upset if you had wasted them.

Keep writing and I'll keep tagging along and reading. Deal?

Ali

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