Open Poetry #46 |
Letter from Me (Now) to Me (Past) - #3 (Poetry Workshop) |
Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
(Present) I don’t have any wisdom Is really all I want to say. Just try to make each day last Don’t let time get pushed away. The parties are just minefields With bonfires, some pot and booze A decision you make while drunk When sober, you’d rarely choose. I don’t have any wisdom You’ll plug your ears while you can You do not care what I think The years bridge us like a span Do not give yourself away Always strive for what you want Or images skip behind you With laughter in every taunt. (Past) You don’t have any wisdom? I listen to what you say I know you are my future I choose what to do today I listen to words you speak They pour out my other ear I see your lips are moving I listen - but I don’t hear. I wish I cared, but I don’t My dream is to be like you You got out and you moved on And I don’t know what to do If you could reach out your hand And spin the fingers of time Maybe then, my ears would hear Something more than empty rhyme. So go on back where you live Someday I might see you there Set things up and make things right Perhaps, then I’ll learn to care. - Alison |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Alison, I have thoroughly enjoy reading this trilogy. This last one, was not only cleverly written, it really struck a strident chord in my heart. ~ Actually, several chords! Well done! Oh, and by the way, there is something charming about the past you and the present one! Love you! Linderlou |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
hello Alison, this is my preferred one of your splendid letters trilogy, I like the dichotomy between present and past and the way you adress to yourself, this is a great idea that will inspire some people I guess, I think of me.... have a nice day yann |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Yes another very enjoyable post dear friend you are a very versatile writer and a clever one too. Take care, love. Lindsay |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
the best for last! yes, I love the unique way it's written |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
very orginal.I enjoyed the three set up. Thanks again.late |
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N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 360New Orleans |
Thank you for your response on my poem. I haven't had many lately and it made my day. I went through and read your poems and did enjoy them to say the least. As always, Beautifully captured. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
What I love most about your work, is I know you really put all you have into the words you write. I slack off sometimes because I have to find inspiration these days, but you dear Alison, use your heart and it works! Beautifully done. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, Linda. Balladeer made me dig and this is what I came up with. That's why there was a trilogy...I kept digging. Anyway, thank you for reading and being my sister. xoxoxo A - yann, Thank you. This is my favorite too - it was the hardest to write. I really love that you read my poetry. xoxox A - Lindsay, What a wonderful thing to say. Thank you. xoxoxo A - Kate, Thank you. It was a fun, but difficult write and challenge that was set forth by our Balladeer in the Poetry Workshop. A - Zach, Thank you for reading my poems and enjoying them. Keep writing and sharing too. Alison - Sharon, Thank you. I love when you come into the Poetry Workshop and spend time with us. You never fail to make me smile. xoxoxo Alison |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I listen - but I don’t hear. Isn't that often the treatment good advice receives, regardless of the source? *S* These letters have really touched me... it takes courage to know one's self and here you show a deep understanding for both who you are now and who you were then. When I read, I look for poems that touch me, that make me feel, that make me think... this series is a home run on all counts. *S* |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You're gonna keep digging, too 'cause when you dig,I dig YOU!!! |
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