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Kamikaze Cupids |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams 
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Kamikaze Cupids Mice scatter beneath A ocean of frozen tundra The Kamikaze Cupid Will steal you You can't hear him Within the safety of the earth The warmth embraces your body But the little red fox Can leap into the sun and dive through the snow almost like a child in a pond. The Kamikaze Cupid Is alive another day. -Juju |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
An interesting thought. Cupid does sort of dive bomb us and explode like a thousand suns. Typo in stanza one. "an"  Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
a lot of kamikazes cupids in this world, thanks for the thoughtful poem, I loved the image of the red fox leaping...keep on the very good work. regards yann |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Juju, This is a nice poem. Yes, that's the way they do it. Love Bobby |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Interesting. I'd say "fascinating", but, well... Wouldn't suggest any changes to this, even though your work here is a bit of a riddle. Deep thoughts aren't necessarily predatory, nor is physical love (or so I am told). Humans can pretend to be hibernating mice or little ponds, but that doesn't make us so. We can be a bit "kamikaze" or quixotical, too---it's not always predatory, nor mere ego oar-stroking... Very good use of imagery throughout, imho. Plz post some more! |
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