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Robert E. Jordan
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0 posted 2010-02-13 08:32 PM

Hungry Bones
walks through
Chinatown.

He looks with longing eyes
into a restaurant window.

There’s a beautiful
Peking duck
hanging in the window.

It looks so good,
and he’d like to
have a bite.

Bones feels a close
fellowship
with the lovely
brown,
roasted,
Peking duck.

It would taste so good.

Oh, the longing eyes.

Bones knows about
those longing eyes.

He's seen them
watching him.

Bobby

[This message has been edited by Robert E. Jordan (02-13-2010 09:36 PM).]

Robert E. Jordan
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1 posted 2010-02-15 06:32 PM

Yo Bones,

I liked this one even if other people hate you and your stories. Keep up the good writing.

Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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2 posted 2010-02-15 09:03 PM

Bones,

You will be very glad to know that this has been recived well at another poetry forum.

One a little more lively than this one.

Bobby

WindWalker12
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3 posted 2010-02-18 01:36 AM

This is a good one!!!!!

passing shadows
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4 posted 2010-02-18 09:30 AM

well, I'd hafta be REALLY hungry to eat a duck
and even then I might opt for leaves and berries

Robert E. Jordan
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5 posted 2010-02-18 12:33 PM

Thanks WindWalker12,

I'm very pleased that you enjoyed the poem.

Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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6 posted 2010-02-18 12:35 PM

Thanks dear Passing shadows,

Bones is always hungry enough to eat a duck, or most anything else. He's not picky.

Peking Duck is excellent.

Love Bobby

Earl Brinkman
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7 posted 2010-03-09 09:29 PM

You have taken a banal experience and twisted it with a clever denouement.

threadbear
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Indy

8 posted 2010-03-10 12:55 PM

Aye! The Eyes have it!
But no Pe-King!
Got to be a candidate for
Fowl Poem of the Year 2010!
Hey, Donald: Duck!
jeff

2islander2
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9 posted 2010-03-10 01:48 PM

Hello Bobby your poem worth Oliver Twist, I enjoyed a lot the portrait with all the sentiments beautifully hidden....thanks for the very good poem.

regards

yann

gilead
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10 posted 2010-03-10 02:20 PM

Hey Bobby -- this is a very intriguing write, and I can relate to Bones' longing, as he seems to live vicariously through the Peking duck, and those eyes that he knows all to well.

I enjoyed this very much. --

Art

Margherita
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11 posted 2010-03-10 05:57 PM

Different longings in different eyes ... everybody's needs are expressed.

You rendered this moment powerfully, dear Bobby.

Love,
Margherita

Robert E. Jordan
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12 posted 2010-03-10 07:11 PM

Thanks Earl,

I'm glad it worked that way for you.

Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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13 posted 2010-03-10 07:12 PM

Thanks Jeff,

For reading and commenting.

Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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14 posted 2010-03-10 07:14 PM

Thanks Yann,

Yes, Oliver Twist is a good description of Bones back in his hungry days.

Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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15 posted 2010-03-10 07:15 PM

Thanks Art,

I'm glad the poem worked that way for you, and thank you for your kind words.

Bobby

Robert E. Jordan
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16 posted 2010-03-10 07:18 PM

Thanks dear Margherita,

Yes, needs are expressed by hungry Bones, while wants, not needs are expressed by the other eyes.

Love Bobby

JamesMichael
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17 posted 2010-03-10 08:04 PM

Enjoyed...James

Robert E. Jordan
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18 posted 2010-03-10 08:45 PM

Thanks James,

I'm pleased that you enjoyed my poem.

Bobby

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