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SlowlyFallAway
Member

since 2008-08-29

Posts 279
North Carolina

0 posted 2010-12-31 12:18 PM

Your features complement you well
The complexion of your face
That look inside your eyes
Your affection never fails
To show that side of fear
We all try desperately to hide
Behind assumed assurance and expected confidence
When being yourself
Seems like a touchy subject
You'd rather just avoid
Because you've been hurt one too many times
And one more broken promise
Could destroy your last thread of trust
Believe me
This is conventional
And as inconvenient as it may seem
I need you to listen when I say,
"You're all I need"
Now that we've involved ourselves in each others thoughts
Processing each dilemma
As if it were our own
You're more than just a shallow commitment
Or another of my failed intentions
With such delicate devotions
And intricate emotions
I'd be proud to be the featured lover
Who you compliment so well

Emily Shives
December 31st 2010

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2010-12-31 06:21 AM

Emily
This is a beautiful expression of emotions from the inside out.

I thought this was really good and oh so true...
"When being yourself
Seems like a touchy subject
You'd rather just avoid
Because you've been hurt one too many times
And one more broken promise
Could destroy your last thread of trust
Believe me
This is conventional
And as inconvenient as it may seem
I need you to listen when I say,
"You're all I need""

Good work!

Eric

ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call
and kinda driftin away from it all

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2010-12-31 06:55 AM

almost written to god...enjoyed it ms

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

3 posted 2010-12-31 07:12 AM

Like the positive outlook this poem has to offer the reader. Although there are darker tones throughout the gist of the poem is optimism. Excellent work.

To mimic is a form of praise unless
you have no thoughts of your own

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2010-12-31 07:25 AM

You really nailed this one. Excellent!
Lori

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