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Dipped in water
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Dipped in water |
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gdcod3player Member
since 2009-09-13
Posts 70California |
Your eyes cant see me You put on a disguise The girl i loved Doing everything to make us fall apart Your heart went out like a light Mine wants to keep you warm The coals thats left The fire is out I loved you But the story you left Its in my hands What do i do without you? My heart is lonely for your hand You were the peace that let me live I let you rip my heart out and use your knife The bleeding has never stopped since you went home I need to count the sheep to get by at night You dont know how the world has change My life will never be the same without you Say good night before we run out of time You let me live so alone My dreams have never been the same since your gone My heart keeps me up at night My mind is broken because of you Lets get dipped in water And say we have done everything right Let me dream of life with you My hearts breaking apart My heart is confessing that you are my hours Tell me what i see when i look at the clock Is it you or just a disguise? My eyes cant see what you have done to me Can i trust myself? |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
You have got the drive of a poet, and the word mastery will come with time and practice. (LOL sez the one still trying to learn that after all these years!  ) Lots of potential here and I can certainly sympathize with the sentiments expressed. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"My heart is confessing that you are my hours Tell me what i see when i look at the clock Is it you or just a disguise?" Never really can know for sure, can you? Especially when you think you know in all certainty who someone is.. people change, drastically, all the time.. right? |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
who we were yesterday is nothing at all like who we are today ... and it can totally, overnight  |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Definitely a "heavy" (as we used to say in the sixties) piece of poetical work. To mimic is a form of praise unless |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
nice...james |
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