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The Kite... |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
The Kite............. (to my lost childhood) One day my kite got tangled in a palm tree I jerked & pulled but the string snapped-- I stood watching as it fluttered in the wind-- tail flapping-- trying to work free That night I prayed for a wind-gust to release it The next day when I woke up it was pouring When it eased to a drizzle I got dressed and hopped on my bike. I arrived just in time and with eyes full of rain I waved it goodbye as it sailed toward the rainbow...... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh ... this is so vivid. Beautiful, I enjoyed it greatly.  Love, Margherita |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Yep. Can see that kite soaring toward its destiny. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
yes a brilliant painting of child moods through the loss os a kite...delicate and vivid. I loved it. yann |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Ah, innocence lost, or dreams denied... I understand. Good thing we get our hands on new kites, though, at different times in life. My best~ Amaryllis A pile of scribbles here: |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
Margherita, 2islander2, Amaryllis, JerryPat: Glad you all enjoyed my journey back in time... Yes Amaryllis, there are new kites --probably more colorful--but there's something about that first one flying over the rainbow... Al Amaryllis |
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Misty Lilacs Senior Member
since 2005-11-15
Posts 1060White Birch Forest |
I loved this! Brought back many memories of my kite flying days. It always ended up in a tree no matter how far from trees I went!! Great write ... Marti I do the <color=orange><b>MS Walk</color></b> everyday!! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
A man never forgets his first kite.... |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
Marti: I'm so pleased and honored that you enjoyed and related to my "kite" --last seen headed toward the rainbow Balladeer: "after the first love, there is no other..." (oops I meant "kite"-or did I?) Thanks for the read! Al |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
I loved this. Different from most. "Poetry and thrift store shopping" .I see a poem right there. LOL latearrial |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
latearrival: glad you enjoyed..I wrote this about a decade ago..never published..I'm now into Japanese haiku, senryu, tanka, haibun...love the shorter forms..suits my ADD--and less words to edit! Al |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Kite flying is such a delight in summer time. Offcourse the risk of bumping into that palm tree is always there. Took me to my childhood days. Fine writing. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
This is quite nice. I have had this experience too. |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
Earl, Prasad: Thanks so much for the read and nice commentary..you've warmed the cockles on this cold december morn.. Al |
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