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Heart stripped bare
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Heart stripped bare |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England 
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Harsh words cut like hot knives through butter. Finality knocking at the door. Erecting barricades I cannot listen, refusing to accept your unyielding verdict. No loving tender recriminations, soft entreaties of love, nor tender reunions planned. Only words filled with self sacrifice and denial, too brittle and hard to bend or soften. My gift returned, unwanted. Heart stripped bare, protective layers laid aside, it's final indignity revealed. Hot salty tears run mingling with cold crystalline snowflakes, freezing instantly like the cold carapace surrounding the remnant of my once beating, loving and devoted heart. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Maybe it is time to take stock of what is most important in your life, yourself or chasing disappearing rainbows. Hope I didn't come off too personal, the poem promoted my response. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Hard to say "Good Write" about such a painful piece, it seems like a contradiction in terms. But it is very good. LGR |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
Honest gutty feelings exposed here...probably a good catharsis...I used to feel my turtle shell hardened to those that betrayed me..but I'm 65 years old now and realize that if I held on to the pain and rigidity for too long, it would only cause me to harden to almost everyone! But at the core we are all soft. I once wrote tumbled by the tides this way and that finally cracked open: how soft we are beyond our lobster shells Hope this helps you mellow in time! thanks for sharing! Al |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Honest pain, anguish, well expressed. Fine writing. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Theres so much pain in this, but a broken heart continues to beat.  Enjoyed.-Trina. |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England |
thanks all for your kind words - catharsis is correct but I also have a very vivid imagination! |
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