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The ring |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa 
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The ring swings round; it seems not proud of what it stood for, how it was, and how it turned away from love in its time of no awareness. I turn it back to face the world like one who knows there is no shame in doing, being, like the rest patterned to conformity. I know it's weighted down by woe for it turns around most every day but it could be me in wilful act of simply letting go. I take it off sometimes to be in my own identity and in that time of rest it lies content on the sidelines. Not one to tolerate a lie I maybe in contrariness force on that ring a punishment but it knows there's no such thing. The ring still swings, I turn it round; it's just a way to say I'm glad that once upon a time there was love between a mum and dad! Helen / 17 November 2010 |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Ouch! Last verse. You write about life and its intricate paths and trails as good as any I've run across. As we used to say in the turbulent sixties, albeit with a different spelling, "Write-On." . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
It is sad, and perhaps all too real for many. You always say it like it is, and that often times leaves me without words. Hugs, honey! It's almost Sunday!!  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You write so beautifully, and this poem has inspired me to share a little story--I hope you don't mind. After the Lord of The Rings Trilogy broke records for its artistry, I bought myself a present. I bought that ring of Power--the ring of invisibility, and replaced my wedding band and engagement ring with that. I happened to tell my son and his girlfriend this story, since she had questioned me about it, and my son said it was the funniest, saddest thing I'd ever said or done--ever.  I hope that you understand that my story sharing is also my hobbit way of hugging you and letting you know that I understand. Your poetry is always immaculate and a gift.  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Dear Bluesy, Oh, yes, Sunday stories - the good old days! This "lady" seems to have more Mondays than Sundays now but that doesn't seem to stop the stories from flowing. For my sins, yes?  Thank you, lovely one, for reading and commenting.Helen |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Hi SB - I disagree with your son because there's nothing funny about it but he is spot on with the sad. I too understand and all too well I might add. Thank you so much for your kind comment about my "poetry". It is greatly appreciated. Oh, well, on with my Sunday - it is Sunday here now. Helen |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
I'm sorry, Jerry, for not acknowledging your comment. Thanks and, yes, I'll probably write on although I think it's time for a break. Helen |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
VERY well said! ... and there are likely WAY too many of us out here amid the "Runaway American Dream" who clearly/deeply understand ... [unfortunate 'modern world(wide)' commonality of relationship experiences; etc.] a most effective 'penning' !! |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
You just carry me along and then hammer me out of the flow of your words. Know what I mean? I have always sought out your poetry - and am so glad that I didn't miss this one. Alison |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you, Bruce, for your much appreciated comment. Hi Alison - Sorry about the "hammering" but, hey, there seems never to be a continual easy flow to anything in life. Thank you so much for reading my rambles.Helen |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Helen The last verse is a real reality check but perfect in it's simplicity for closure of sorts. Granted, the relationship you are writing about didn’t become all that was hoped. But remember this: In the middle of a storm, it’s easy to focus on the dark sky and the pouring rain. Eventually, though, the rain stops and the sky clears and that's what your poetry does.....Makes it all clear. It's a precious love decongestant. Dr Eric, love doctor...... Excellent! Eric |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh dear, doctors aren't my favourite people at the moment but I reckon I can add Dr. Eric to my phone list. Thanks, Eric. Helen |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Don't know what time it is over there, I didn't look but it's early here and these trips into the many perspectives of the poets here tend to wake me up (if that's humanly possible) and give me something to ponder over during the day... So chin up and soak in some sun for me over there. It's cold up here in Canada! Dr Eric |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Sending sun your way, Eric. We had one of our usual thunder storms last night but it's beautifully clear and bright today. It's nearly 11.00 am here now. I don't know how you guys survive your winters. I'd die! Helen |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Helen...amazing how we make *things* so important. Perhaps because then it is in our power to change the meaning. Or can we? Hugs!! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Helen, I was unclear - I am sorry if I sounded negative. You write so beautifully .. it was this poem that hammered me. I think you got hammered and illustrated the feeling very well in your poetry. I am not one to critique. I only know how I feel ... and your poetry makes me feel. Love, Alison |
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