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Bizarre Expedition |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India 
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Bizarre Expedition Wintry evening welcomes stranger shadows, They stretch pull each other, swaying gentle heads, Some glitter like the finest pearl from ocean deep, The others fade away, to the wandering oblivion, On elevating green sour droplets finds its home, Iniquitous twig dwarfs rejoice on camp leftovers, While unnoticing crawling obnoxious rattler hisses, Weaving maiden gobbles her unwise brave knight, Ultrasonic undetectable sounds of the upside down, Munching purple globes, spilling the crimson juice, Opportunist the ever cautious hoot of the deadly caws, Perfect supper dine, furry warm coats with long tails, Maladroit footsteps, mind in trance, antenna freak, Wasting those warm summer lyrics on bitter night, A lonely vintage beauty strikes a lingering tiny pose, Click, click, bizarre flickering lights hit the wide roads. ©Prasad.N 6th Nov 2010. All rights reserved to Prasad.N |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Are you related to Lewis Carroll? Wow! This is very intriguing and highly imaginative......Gotta love the minute world and all the surroundings Really enjoyed this. Eric |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
I agree with Eric... loving this woozy yet beautiful trip through your pen, Prasad...!  like the startling juxtapositions you`ve placed here and there... I could never decide whether you were writing of summer or winter, or both, and, of course, their metaphorical layerings... in the end it does not matter if I`m slightly wrong or not, because the poem on it`s own is a delight of image and language. Great stuff! Best~ Amaryllis |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Here and there throughout this fasinating poem, Prasad, I got a sense of the "Beats" of Greenwich Village fame in the late 1950's. Loved the rich portrayal of the denizens of your poem. Eric and his Lewis Carroll is also apropos. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done sir... the image of the spider and the bats done in unique -phrasing that adds to the mystery of the piece truly enjoyed! |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank you for taking time to comment and reading Eric. Such a wonderful comment, it humbles me that talented poets are so kind. Really appreciate it.  Thank you for taking time to comment and reading Amaryllis. Such kind words, I am flattered. Been a great fan of fantasy lands all my life and I enjoy watching the little creatures while I go out camping. Really appreciate it.  Thank you for taking time to comment and reading Jerry. I’ve looked up about the Beat movement, its quiet fascinating read. Really appreciate it.  Thank you for taking time to comment and reading Cpat Hair. Glad you found the spider and bats phrasing unique. Really appreciate it. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent writing, Prasad. You use the language like a fine tool to carve out a thing of beauty, although I must say I consider rattler hisses a little more than obnoxious!!  Write on!  |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank you Sir, for taking time to comment and reading. Really kind words from a wonderful talented poet as you. Haa, rattler's are aggressive only when provoked, which humans do to most animals, at times knowingly, at times unknowingly. Appreciate it. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've lived where the ocean roars I've resided by the plains I know that deep within my core I'll see winter once again.  Aha...you're moving my muse...that's a good sign of a good poem. At least, for me.  |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank you for taking time to comment and reading Karilea, sure you’ll see many more winters and springs to come. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank you for taking time to read and commenting James. Appreciate it. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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