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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America 
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The small boy stood in the door, Watching his grandpapa snore. Amid trappings and concealment, The sick bed looked like a tent. Death's smell, heavy in the air, Too much for the boy to bear. Turned to leave, he could not stay, And see his grandpapa that way. Wait, a weaken voice did ask, Beneath bed covers, a mask. Please don't go, his bony hand Beckoned him and did command. The lad, paused for a second, Then took the hand that beckoned. Tears fell freely, he did sit, Though afraid, he did admit. An old claw-hand squeezed the boy's Faintly, all his strength destroyed. Come, let's talk, his feeble voice rose, sounding like reborn joy. "Grandpapa, oh, please don't go, I'll miss you so, don't you know?" He raised the thin hand, so old, Pressed it to his lips, tears did grow. Do you know of man's awe and strife? Listen, child, I speak of life. The old one sank back in bed The boy hoped he wasn't dead. "Yes, Grandpapa, explain to me Things that help with life, I agree." The gaunt hand waved tenderly, Mouth moved, word barely heard, Yes. A rumbling cough seized his chest, He lifted his arm as if to bless. Spoke like his life was in review Boy, to yourself always be true. "Love, grandpapa, how will I know?" You'll know when your heart starts to glow. "Mom and dad's marriage is all through What will make them stay? Lover's glue?" Gaunt eyes stared with life's ebb and flow Often wonder why people go. His chest rattled from a weak cough Selfishness is why they break-off. They just have too much on their minds, And every day stuff becomes a grind. "How I can be rich, Grandpapa?" Most people go outside the law. The old one gripped his fragile chest Relaxed like he had lost his zest. Looked the boy in the eye and said, Always respect what's in your head. A woman walked into the room Sweeping up the floor with a broom. The boy stepped aside, let her by, She stopped, looked, and let out a sigh. Why you in here son, all alone? "Talking to gramps 'bout being grown." She held him as the tears did flow, Son, grandpa died hours ago. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Fine lessons from a wise old man, Ending is perfect.Fine writing Jerry. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thank you, Prasad, I appreciate your comment. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Well done! Loved the ending. Kat >^..^< |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thank you, katahdin, it is appreciated. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
That was a fine piece of writing...just the tender kind of thing that brings a tear to my eye...ebm |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Although I didn't dedicate it to him, this poem was written in memory of my grandfather. He lay in state in our house and I remember standing, all alone, in the door to the room where he was and just staring at the casket and trying to make out what was happening, I was a wee lad at the time. Thank you ebm. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Misty Lilacs Senior Member
since 2005-11-15
Posts 1060White Birch Forest |
A moving and touching bit of writing! Marti |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
I appreciate your words about my poem, Marti, thank you. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
It has already been said but I`ll say it again. The ending was perfect. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Many thanks, Earl. I'm glad you liked it. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
JerryPat....wonderfully touching love story with an ending written by a pro. |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
This is a really touching piece. Its like I was there. Thanx for sharing.  -Trina. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
You are too sweet, Martie, and I thank you very much. Trina, your comment about you being there made my day, thank you. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hard to let that love go. Great ending. The ability to recognize true wisdom is a real special gift. Very enjoyable from beginning to end. Eric |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thank you Eric. Your words mean much to me. |
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